in the darkness
the heron's call
haunts her memory~
Author notes
Written May 16th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- Passions Haiku & Cinquains by MagicLady.
500 points, ended May 18, 2005, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Excellent
Such a great write sis and use of form. So very well done.
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in brightest sunlight
angels shine health upon her
lovely days to come
you are an angel sis
who is very much loved! -
This is a real treat, the picture and haiku are made for each other
Beautiful
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I think I need to know more about heron's to understand this one unless 'her' is the individual listening.
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So rarely does one come across a decent haiku - modern poets frequently write drivel in the terms of obvious, none nature-related. This was simple beautiful and very well written - very enigmatic, a beautiful, simple write.
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This is quite nice Susan. The picture is beautiful and so is your haiku.
Wishing you all the best always,
Mari
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I want to send you some applause! Thank you sis for supporting my efforts!
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Susan, I think this is esoteric and lovely in the light of thoughts that holds remembrance poignantly. As always, you shine through these few words.
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This is a georgoeus haiku! The imagery you have made through such few words is incrediable! It evokes so many different thoughts in the reader's mind. 'haunts her memory'. That part I love! The title does not give any of the poem away, which is great. In fact, it does not let the reader in at all! The haiku has a mysterious, haunting feel to it, and yet there are only three lines! You have managed to convey so much through this, which I know is difficult to do with haikus. An excellent write! Keep them coming!
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Very pretty sis! As always you know how to make a Haiku so effective, BEAUTIFUL! All the best in the contest sweetie, Love and many hugs, Annie
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Dear Molly,
A hauntingly heronic haiku. Well done and good luck in the contest.
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I'm sad to hear your latest news
will keep you in my prayer.
Try not to succumb to the blues
but be ye of good cheer.
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Special love and hugs, XXX Hugh. -
Nice one, Sis! You are always in my thoughts and prayers. Please keep in touch. I miss you so much!
Love Ya!
♥ Maureen
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Great haiku Susan
with an unexpected ending, which is the nature of haiku. Great job, great picture. Good luck in the contest.
~Lyrical
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Cool haiku, Susan...& yeah, I'll echo everyone else, too...great picture to go with it...MagicLady will love it...
Wanda
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You picked a perfect picture to go with this. Nicely done.
~Amanda~
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Thanks sis
Took me awhile to find that pic
But I thought it was really pretty since it was a haiku about the dark and heron
Ty for the wonderful comment...will keep you updated about tomorrow
I got to go to bed and try to get rid of this nasty headache
Talk to ya later
Love n hugs
Susan~~~
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Beautifully done and WOW!!! what a perfect picture to go with it. An awesome combo!!!
Bonnie
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Thanks
took me awhile to find the right pick but it was about nighttime and sure could not put a daytime heron in the pic so I thought this one was perfect too
I am off here got to try and lay down
Will let you know about tommorrow
Hugs n love sis
Susan~~~
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This is lovely, Susan. There's so much can be expressed in just three little lines. I love haiku's and yours is especially nice.
Good luck in the contest
Luv and
Dee
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It did come out wonderful Sis - and such a perfect picture to go with the Haiku...
I'll catch up with you tomorrow.
Best of luck with the contest. He really is such a perfect bird!
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