I lost my soul,
my only love,
the tears I cry,
for the fallen dove.
Her death painful,
her life small,
the memories fade,
she answered the call.
The man she loved,
stole her away,
beat her to death,
the shrink said it was okay.
All I have left,
is this broken chain,
it's just a reminder,
of all her pain.
I sit here crying,
wishing my last breathe,
if I could just save her,
even if it meant my death.
Author notes
For my sister, may she rest in peace.
Written May 16th, 2005
A contest entry
- what ever you want by lilb420.
300 points, ended September 23, 2005, 21 entries
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Beautiful poem, which uses great imagery to make it so deep, dark and moving. Great job!
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i think i'm crying
brillient -
Wow...very depressing. Love your work though. Beautiful.*
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This is very sad.. Very powerful. I love the rhyme.. Great use of imagery.
Very well written
Good luck in the contest -
omg thats so sad
.. i'm speechless hun, I couldn't even begin to imagine what it would be like to lose someone this way .. big hugs to you 
.. thanks for entering and i wish you all the best in the contest 
~Aimee
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wow this was so beautiful yet so sad..the imageery was captivating...truly beautiful well done on this xxxxxxxxx
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