See the crimson liquid flow
Like a flooded river of pain.
Rinse the wound with salty tears;
They're falling down like rain.
Plummeting into madness now
With a bruised and bloodied soul;
Carrying the blade throughout
Don't want to lose control.
Cry out now with upset eyes
Feel the anger within;
Watch the power crumble
And the insanity begin.
Scream with hatred and remorse
While slicing once more;
Extreme emotions overcome
Shaking to the core.
Every cut brings more pain
And yet it calms the rage;
Living in a hollow world
Housed within a cage.
Solitary dying soul
But no one even cares;
Another girl that hates the world
Forsaking all the prayers.
Watch the body heal itself
Replacing all the skin;
But the soul still bleeds from every
*Goddamn fucking pin*.
Author notes
I used to cut with a safety pin but then I stopped. I recently, as in two days ago, relapsed and I'm using razors now but, I didn't want to change the poem. Thanks, ~Lilly~
Written May 15th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- i want cutting poems or aobut taking pills.perferably cutting by lips of deceit.
300 points, ended August 27, 2006, 19 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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That is, one brilliant poem. Its well written, it flows fantastically and I absolutely love it and the truth to the words. Great write and keep up the good work..
Good luck in the contest
Claire-Anne
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i understand this poem all to well 2 thumbs up
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This is a very powerful write with an awesome rhyme in it. I really liked it.
peace and love
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this was a great poem to read. i used to cut as well, so i can relate very much to this piece. i myself havent cut in months, which im happy about. but some days i wonder if ill ever relapse. it's not really anything i want to go through again, but i guess only time and circumstance will tell. anyway im gettin to ramble and be a little too personal here, so i just wanna say this was a great piece, and that i hope all will turn out for you
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"Watch the body heal itself
Replacing all the skin;
But the soul still bleeds from every
*Goddamn fucking pin*."
Holla! I'm agreeing with each line of this poem, I loved it! Thanks for entering!
Bandaid -
great job
i love it really i do
i love ti
it was simple in a way
but aswosme
thanx for entering
LIPS OF DECEIT-10! -
wow, this an amazing poem. i love it. i really like it alot. thank you so much for entering. i hope u do great
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I thought that this was an amazing write, your imagery was perfect and really let the reader see exactly what you were portraying. Your words expressed deep, pure, honest emotion that flood from your soul, that you are tryin to explain to the reader. The last stanza I completly loved, it was the perfect ending to this amazing write. I hope to read more from you soon. Keep writing, -Heather
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amazing!!!!
this is amazing joy. i read your bio. tee hee. thats my middle name and i hate it too. but newaz... yea, i love this poem. it is soooooooo well written. amazing detail. you know exactly what you are talking about with each word. a lot of emotion and darkness. just the way i like them! this is an awesome write! GREAT job!!!! -
keep writing
great way to burst through the barrier of hidden emotion and basically say to the world YOU WANNA FEEL MY PAIN THEN FINE HERE IT IS! -
Your words express such deep-cutting emotion. Well done!! This is beautiful in its own dark way and shows the pain and sorrow wrapped around the heart and soul of its creater.
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Hun, I LOVED your imagery! I was hooked from the get-go. I also love how flowing the rhyme scheme was. Thank you so much for not falling into the rhyme trap! I hate it when people sacrifice content for the end rhyme. But you didn't do that, except in one place. The line "And everybody stares." is bordering on falling into the rhyme trap. I would review that line. But other than that, great write! You had some nice similes...
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This is the best so far I’m a sucker for a good rhyme, but self harm with a pin cant be much fun
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An exceptionally good write. The concept was intriguing, the rhyming was great. I loved the depressing tone to it! Keep up the good work... : )
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Awesome babe, just awesome. I like the last stanza the most. The flow was good and suported the style, props and cheer up!!! I've been going through too much shit lately so you need to have a good day!! love ya
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Awesome work. Awesome flow and style. Hope you win the contest. Great job.
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awsome
wow. you did a wonderful job.
loved this!
best of luck to you in the contest
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i loved it
wow, i really enjoyed reading your poem. this is a great write, it flowed very nicely and had a depressing tone to it, which is my favorite kind of poetry in case you couldnt tell. it has a lot of power and emotion in every line, good luck in the contest. pen on!!
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Joy - this was awesome. I loved it - Good luck in the contest.
~Stormy~
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