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Meeting My First Boyfriend at the Age of Twenty

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by ~Gregg Rowe~

He dresses funny
they said
    so I took him home
    stripped him to the skin
    softly laid him on my comforter
    and there
    discovered his body fit perfectly
                                 next to mine

He's too smart
they said
    so I kissed his lips,
    his tongue
    his heart
    and then
    kissed the intelligence off again.

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Written May 14th, 2005

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  • lovelustre
    December 8, 2006
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    A perfect fit: body and mind.


  • lordoftherings gold member
    May 14, 2005
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    Carter: It is one of those poems where I just want to remain in the moment, where time is frozen and that the forces have stopped. I have a feeling it is the last line that is throwing everyone off, but I look at it as a rebuttal for the old cliché love is blind, that after the honeymoon and meeting and moving in, you really discover your lover and what I intend by the phrase of intelligence is that experience makes us more cautious in the next affair ...hopefully(and relationships are never ending to begin with)! Gregg


  • CarterTachikawa
    May 14, 2005
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    Very beautiful poem. For some reason, I thought this was going to be sad. It seems complete and incomplete at the same time. It feels like that if you go further, you might ruin the mood. Yet if you keep it there, you leave the reader hanging on and wanting more. I suppose the latter sounds better. Very good stuff. Keep writing.

    ~CT


  • ICaughtFire
    May 14, 2005
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    Hm. This is interesting. I actually quite like it. Its got a warm feeling..But unlike stumbleine1, I felt it was imcomplete. It didn't quite feel finished to me, -sigh.- Ah well, great write.
    -x-


  • singtherevolution
    May 14, 2005
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    Very interesting. I love poetry in this format. It's kind of conversational, but at the same time very poetic. If that makes any sense (which it probably doesn't... hehe)

    It's amazing that in just two short stanzas you were able to create such a tone. It's warm and sensual, and most definitely sweet.

    Sounds like you've found someone special. Congratulations, and good luck in the future.


  • FallingDeep
    May 14, 2005
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    whoa. this is way deeper the more you read it. I really enjoy it. You captured the wonderment and care of having someone in a perfectly naive, novel way...i love it. wonderful work.

    Always,
    ~*XChelseaX*~


  • Pisces Pond
    May 14, 2005
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    Interesting..
    Have fun...

  • chicky84
    May 14, 2005
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    hmmm....Cool.Glad you found him.

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