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A Fishy Tale

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Pieces of eight, or was it ten
were counted out by big strong men,
fine jewels and plunder they had took
and rare old stories ..(to fill a book)

Now "Naughty Meg" was captain still,
with Peg-leg Bill..her Cockatoo
he'd screech and roar.. Oh!ship Ahoy!
and torment the life out of the cabin boy

Once, quite a beauty Meg would date
hoping like all.. to find a mate,
but all she found were common "riff-Raff"
(who should have served within the "draft"

Then one fine day, she took a walk
along the quay..(where rocks were chalk,)
she spied a fella sitting there,
curling and braiding his golden hair

They quickly fell in love that day,
romancing and hugging ..(like in a play)
he told her she should leave him soon
as he would surely bring her doom

"What's this ," she cried so full of sorrow
"we cannot meet upon the morrow?"
he looked away and hung his head..
(he really wished that he were dead)

A pirate ship is all I own,
a few brave men and an old trombone,
a treasure chest ..(with naught inside)
she shed a tear, with this news supplied

"I'll sail with you, my brave young man,
across the seas to old Hong-Kong,
with me with you, you can't go wrong!
the boys and peg-leg can come along"

So off they sailed on their merry way
plundering and pillaging.. (all the day)
they might get wed, when a fortunes made
but the chances of that are well outweighed........

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Written May 14th, 2005

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  • cutiepie gold member
    May 15, 2005
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    I certainly did ..makes a pleasent change from what I normally write. Many thanks for your kind comments
    Edited on May 15, 3:55 p.m. because ''.

  • painted jezebel
    May 15, 2005
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    I love it!!

    Awesome! I bet you had as much fun writing this as I had reading it!!

  • cutiepie gold member
    May 14, 2005
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    Aw, I am delighted that you enjoyed this..I had great fun writing it

  • cutiepie gold member
    May 14, 2005
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    Thank you John,

  • cutiepie gold member
    May 14, 2005
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    Many thanks for your lovely comments

  • cutiepie gold member
    May 14, 2005
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    Thank you Sarah Delighted that you enjoyed this tale

  • cutiepie gold member
    May 14, 2005
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    Thanks Kat Glad you enjoyed it


  • queenie
    May 14, 2005
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    you got me twice,a story poem and a pirate one at that.this must be one of my better days for this was one of the best written poems of the day for me.it has romance,adventure and a happy albiet unsure ending.i just loved it.


  • Lyrical Soul silver member
    May 14, 2005
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    I'm sorry but That's funny!!!

  • cutiepie gold member
    May 14, 2005
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    Thank you Jonny Glad you enjoyed this yarn


  • cutiepie gold member
    May 14, 2005
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    Perhaps there was a little sadness probably down to the bad playing of the trombone have you ever listened to anyone learning to play the trombone?...awful!!I once tried to play the violin, and the violin teacher asked me to leave as I gave her a migraine


  • John Yelling
    May 14, 2005
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    Great story and rhythme. I enjoyed it through and through.


  • cutiepie gold member
    May 14, 2005
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    I have to confess, the mood dictates the word choices and tonight it was.. "silly" ..Glad you njoyed it

  • cutiepie gold member
    May 14, 2005
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    ..had great fun writing this..must be the child in me Glad you like it


  • CountryCousin
    May 14, 2005
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    Brilliant

    This was truly neat and had the true flavor of a pirate tale. So well done and brilliant.


  • LaKitKat
    May 14, 2005
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    This was great, I love a pirate tale any day of the week and this made me laugh. Well done. Kat

  • Fellow poet
    May 14, 2005
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    HAHA loved it, Very nice story, You are the story teller.
    Your buddy poet,
    Jonny


  • Lyrical Soul silver member
    May 14, 2005
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    I know this is supposed to be humorous, and it was but I read a little sadness woven in to. Maybe it's just me, hmmm. Either way, a very lovely pirate tale Lynne. Great job!

    ~Lyrical


  • Imokon
    May 14, 2005
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    lol, that was a pleasant tale. It was full of suspense when he hung his head, I was expecting something dramatic, instead it was something really silly.
    And the last stanza is amazing. I can see this poem allueding to modern society as well.
    Love it.

  • RainyLullaby
    May 14, 2005
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    You can never go wrong if you have a musical instrument! Okay, sorry. I liked it, cute story. Nice job. Loved the odd rhymes you had, i never would have thought of those. Great writing!

    ~Raine~

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