There is the life I am living,
And the life I want to be living.
It hurts
to even glance at the mirror.
You say I'm pretty and skinny,
I don't believe it.
Seeing you,
With everyone
In the palm of your hand.
You tell me you're my friend,
Then why do you do these things.
I never did anything to you,
Yet you take revenge.
Ruining my life,
While still maintaing
To be my comfort.
You steel my friends,
My love,
My words and ideas,
My life.
Are you happy?
Your living the life
You have always wanted...
MINE!!
Author notes
i don't really like this one-it's kind of jumbled. tell me what ya think!ty
Written May 14th, 2005
A contest entry
- Betrayal by Neon Lights.
300 points, ended October 28, 2005, 20 entries
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its interesting to read these poems again. i'm tearing up. Oh, excuse me, i have three tears. sorry mr. ringsmuth! i'm sorry betzy...
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I really like this. It's got a much different feel then most of the poems in this contest. And I really like the ending. A poem about someone wanting your life is such an awesome idea. Kudos to you on writing it. Thanks for entering and good luck!
~Fi~
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your welcome.
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thanks!!
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well yeah its jumbled. But your frined wow mean. I like it though.
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I was not at all confused, my dear...many of us have friends like that. Its sad....but a powerful write! Good flow! Peace...Syah
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its a little confusing, but this shows me that its from your mind and you haven't kinda forced it. if you want you add another feel free to. its a nice piece, maybe add a few more lines and be a little more bitchy and it would give real emotion! l8az good luck sky xxx
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