Looking in your eyes
I see the desire for me
As I kiss you hungrily
Needing more, not getting enough
I cling to your arms
I'm going week
You hold me close
Nibbling my ear
And down my neck
I'm in heaven
You unbutton my shirt
And I gasp as you suck and kiss
I peel your shirt off
Over your head
And kiss your chest
You continue to go down
Slowly sliding my pants off
As I undo yours
I tremble as you find my everything
You begin to kiss and lick
You come back up
Then I cry out
As we join as one
Author notes
Written May 13th, 2005
A contest entry
- A lover's touch.. by HopelessUnwanted.
300 points, ended July 7, 2005, 4 entries
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Thanks. Do you think maybe I should work on it? Or put more detail in it?
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Emotion, and it is very true, but may I suggest slowing the pace a little, it seemed to me to go a bit fast. Or maybe the ending came up to quickly. Good write.
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Your welcome. Good luck in the contest.
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Thanks.
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Awesome!
Nice poem. I love it. It's very well written.
- Andi
Edited on Sep 24, 5:32 p.m. because ''. -
Remember the poem Seduction? THis is what you commented.
It's about Chris right. You two are so cute together. But if he hurts you he's dead.
"You two are so cute together" BLAH -
hey loser great write! SO.... wonder where you came up with the title. No really I love we will be best friends until I die. This is a great poem and I love the title. It's about Chris right. You two are so cute together. But if he hurts you he's dead... lol
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super freakin awesome
i loved this poem, its beautifully written. dont stop writng.
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