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The Blue Lagoon

BLUE LAGOON

The reflection of the blue lagoon,
fill my senses as I lookd in your eyes,
mesmerised in my own blue Heaven,
I was captivated by each little sigh.

A tropical paradise of turquoise splendor,
nature's softness and beauty call to me,
distant whitecaps beyond the horizon,
disappear into the vastness of the sea.

Passion is welling deep within my heart,
the fragrance of jasmine fills the air,
the blue lagoon has taken me captive,
the fire in your kiss shows me you care.

The stillness of the lagoon is misleading,
in our love the depth can not be seen,
though you eyes say sweet surrender,
hidden messages are felt in between.

I stand here lost in the beauty of you,
on this isle of beauty and temptation,
lost in you eyes till the morning sun,
a slave to it's opaque blue sensation.

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Written May 13th, 2005

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  • Sandygram
    June 22, 2005
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    Thank you for the comment. It is appreciated. Take care, Sandy


  • gowiththeflow
    June 22, 2005
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    excellent!!! :)

    I LIKED THIS POEM ALOT, woa caps lock , um i dont know what to say but good luck in the contest.....


  • Sandygram
    May 15, 2005
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    Thank you for the nice comment. I do appreciate it. Take care, Sandy

  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    May 14, 2005
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    This is beautifully written, your imagery fantastic and you allow the reader to journey with you. An island paradise, this really was splendid.


  • BluRosePoet8488
    May 13, 2005
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    Vey Beautifully written my friend

    Sandy...
    An awesome write once again. Filled with lots of beautiful imagery. The reader seems to float with your words very gently. Good work as usual. Best of luck in the contest. Love and hugs...
    ~Donna~


  • May 13, 2005
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    Gorgeous!

    I stand here lost in the beauty of you
    on this isle of beauty and temptation
    lost in you eyes till the morning sun
    a slave to is opaque blue sensation
    Sandy, this is outstanding beautiful in all aspects... you know when I think of turquoise I picture this, floating away to my island paradise! Simply gorgeous! A winner my dear friend, all the best, and God bless, Annie


  • Forms of Me
    May 13, 2005
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    Beautiful...The imagery is really wonderful....as well as the feelings conveyed. Good luck in the contest my dear friend....I love this picture...you think we can go here for a while?? I suppose we have to wait til heaven huh?

    LIZ

    Edited on May 13, 11:35 because ''.


  • CountryCousin
    May 13, 2005
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    Beautiful

    Beautiful and you do seem to have the flow down well. I truly liked this one and congratulations on a fine write.

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