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Dogfart

At night I dream of days long past,
an alcoholic nightmare,
a filth that is unfair.
At night I see nothing of worth to see,
and not a soul should care.

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Written May 11th, 2005

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  • TheMuffinMan
    May 13, 2005
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    thanks


  • a7ebech eini
    May 13, 2005
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    observe, make out, spot, notice, glimpse, witness, set eyes on, et cetera


  • Seven Kinky
    May 12, 2005
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    Hmm...an interesting title. I must say that's the only reason I clicked on this poem. Heh...I'm amused by bathroom humor. But, yes...an interesting premise for a write, indeed. Nicely done. *Shrugs* I'm commented out. Lol...I have nothing of worth to say.

  • TheMuffinMan
    May 12, 2005
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    Thanks, any suggestion on a word? I cant think of one...

  • a7ebech eini
    May 12, 2005
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    this was good, but in "At night I see nothing of worth to see" you might want to find another word for see, because it sounds slightly redundant

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