the slow and smokeless burning of decay
destroys our love, and kills it day by day
i staunchly refuse to see it; but you will not sway
you claim it wasn't supposed to end this way
i don't believe you, it can't be true
what more did you want me to do?
i tried to hold you close and near to me
i tried to make you say you'd never leave
i know this is cliche, but i wanted you to know
i never ever thought that i wanted you to go
all this fault lies entirely with you-
i still don't know what else you wanted me to do...
Author notes
okay, so i hate this- read it anyways--- another piece of trivial shit that i came up with in the middle of a class
Written May 12th, 2005
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well i liked it... it didn't seem like trivial shit as you called it. it seems like real feelings that are bothering you... nice work.
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within the first sentece you had me longing to read more and more. even though every poem has to come to its end... i didnt want it to stop. i loved it. i felt like you were sitting right here reading it outloud to me.... great job!
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I like it. I really do, it's one of those that speak to me. It's awesome...I love poems like this
Great job --Gloria
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Not trivial within the least. I heard it's message and concure.I have felt this same feelings myself. Great write.~~Suseann
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