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How

How does he do it
how can he make you feel this way
how come you have no control
how come you have no say

how does he control your heart
how many times can he mess up
how many times can he hurt you
how long until you give up

how does he make you feel like you don't have a clue
how long until you can break through
how hard are you gonna have to try
how long do you have to cry

how ever long it takes, he will make no more mistakes
how long will he last
how ever long it takes for him to realize he made a stupid mistake

Author notes

i dont think the end is worded right but oo well....
Written May 12th, 2005

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  • Adarann Delante
    May 25, 2005
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    It will take as long at it may
    To see that it shouldnt be this way
    It will take as long as it might
    To be able to have one good long night
    It will take as it will take
    To be able to say it wasnt fake
    Somethings are meant to be
    While others can not be seen
    It will take as long as needed
    Before he sees what should be heeded

    I enjoyed it. Very punctual. And to the point. Feels like its something that has been experience either by yourself or someone you know. Being on the outside looking in isnt always the best p.o.v. Sometimes ignorance really is bliss. This shows what could happen if that is taken to far.

    at least...thats what I saw.
    Edited on May 25, 4:55 p.m. because 'I cant keep one thought in my head i guess...'.


  • CountryLullaby
    May 23, 2005
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    thank you!!!! it makes me feel good!!! i hope there is someone out there! maybe there is!!!


  • Celticpoet
    May 22, 2005
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    Dont you fret!...someone as nice as you are will have a lovely guy come looking for you sooner than you think!

  • CountryLullaby
    May 22, 2005
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    thank you so much! i hope i find the answer soon though!lol


  • Celticpoet
    May 20, 2005
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    Good!...I like this!

    I like this!...I like it a lot!....its just one of the many questions you ask yourself on the journey of Love!...sometimes we find the answer very quickly...other times it takes a lot of perseverance...but finally...we usually get the answer in the end!

  • Sweet Summer Rose
    May 14, 2005
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    Hey babe this is good.. and i definetely know what you mean.. but i still love you !! Great poem!


  • May 13, 2005
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    I really liked it when I read it in class, so I decided to come back and comment on it..Love ya.
    ~DAniela

  • falling through
    May 12, 2005
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    good job darlin i can DEFINATELY relate.dont worry about it... ill always be here and you know the numbers! luv ya...L


  • DarlingStac
    May 12, 2005
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    this was good.. i can relate to this.. great job.. xoxo stac

  • ChelseaNicole
    May 12, 2005
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    awww casey that is good but i didnt know that my poem would make u cry
    love ya
    ~chelsea~

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