I can influence the future
I am not alone
I am connected to it all
So you are too
It is my belief that our
purpose here, is to learn how
to be responsible creators
I have the freedom to be
woven into any possibility
Consciousness is the ground
of all being
through observation
I simply am
in heaven
I can go from
any form to any emotion
because they are the same:
Atoms, ideas, strings
There is no reward
The mind is a storm
The cruelest tyrannical trick
we have played upon ourselves
is religion, war, disease, and ignorance
How far down the rabbit hole do I want to go?
It doesn't matter, as long as I go
And I want you, to come with me.
Author notes
I am god, so are you
Quantum physics
will see you through.
Written May 12th, 2005
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You are the left: I am the right
You seemed to have lost your companion along the way...I think she will follow you anywhere to avoid the sickening pain of not being with the same. -
This struck me firstly as a very romantic piece. Probably because of the last line. But I absolutely loved it. I really did.
I love the confidence in this one. The confidence seemed to be a part of an absolute thing, but then the words are relative.
Great job and thank you for making me think!
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Bullseye, what can I say, I'm an imaxaholic, please forgive me.
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"what the bleep do we know?"
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Well, Horus, you know me -- I have to applaud any poem that weaves in notions of quantum physics. Here, the notion is even characterized in the author notes. I trust you are familiar with the "split screen" test which proves Heisenberg's Uncertainty Principle? It seems so to me, at least, by virtue of the opening lines "I can influence the future / I am not alone / I am connected to it all / So you are too." That is a nice summarization of how motion and position are not dually knowable, so that if you observe one you affect the other. I also see a reference to string theory in a later line. I am personally happy to see a poet on my favs list take on this subject matter.
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I like this. Very zen-like. We are all connected in the end. I'm not sure I can influence the future, but after I pass the bar, I might be able to influence the present...
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This really isn't exactly my genre, but I still can appreciate nice flow, and good texture. And this is very well done. I'm not sure you, but you might have meant belief rather than believe. But no matter, With all that's going on, down the rabbit hole might be the safest place for us all. See ya there.
Peace,
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Excellent Bravo!! Two thumbs up!!
This was an absolute free fall into the spritual realm of being as we are and should be
Brava!! The message is clear we are all... "I have the freedom to be
woven into any possibility
Consciousness is the ground
of all being" and yes, the red flags of diconnections... "The cruelest tyrannical trick
we have played upon ourselves
is religion, war, disease, and ignorance" Well said!! Bravo! Wishing you and yours much success in all of your endeavors! -
Nice work indeed- personally I would like to follow a super model down a rabit hole rather than you but that is a matter of tatste.
david
It is my believe that our - belief? -
Ah, I knew you were going to say that, and of course you would, you're not a poet yet. The reason I did that? Is because they are two separate thoughts of one identical vision, thank you, next.
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I'm, apparently, waiting?
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I think believe should be belief. There were a few punctuational errors, but maybe it's just the way I write.
And I want you, to come with me.
In that last line i wouldn't have the comma between you and to.
That's all i notice for now -
Really, what error?
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Very nicely written. I enjoyed reading it, and thank you for posting. Interesting message behind it, though I did notice just a few errors that stood out. But thanks for giving me the opportunity to read this.
Blessings-
~Heather
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