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Together

he looked at you as if he'd never had eyes before
you didn't give a second glance
he cared for you, would die for you
and you grew to feel the same
as time went on you were in love
and the bond grew strong, and broke, in an instant
one second and all was lost
never to be gained again
the trust that you confided in and found comfort in,
swayed, and fell like a tree after a storm
you drifted apart falling for other people
but still an unknown love remained
who knows if the past will come back to you,
being together again
but still he gazes at you
and although you may not know it or see it,
he will always be there

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Written May 11th, 2005

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  • BeautifulAngelicSin
    June 22, 2005
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    Tnx for the comment on my poem 'Daddy's Girl'.
    This is an amazing poem. You did a job on it! Reach for the stars and never stop writting.
    **Shanna**


  • ourhouse62
    June 3, 2005
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    thank you so much for your comment i really appreciate it from such a skilled writer as yourself!


  • Allyson Michelle
    June 3, 2005
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    This was absolutely GORGEOUS. You have an amazing talent. I loved the simplistic style but the complex emotions and talent set behind it. THis is wonderful. THe piece is so tragic and yet so beautifully composed. I adore your skills as a writer, this was phenomenal. It really made my heart drop, it was so sad and yet so lovely.