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My Muscles

Hey,
Have you seen my beachball anywhere?
Last time I saw it was over there.
Or maybe it went that way i dont know
If you see it can you bring it back to my show
When you get there, could you get me a bandaid
Cause these guns are cut and they need a good grade
Either that or get me some tape
Cause these guns are so big they've ripped my cape
Hold on wait a sec got to repump my guns
Cause if I dont my show's done

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Please help me rewrite it and make it better!!
Written May 11th, 2005

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  • Midnight Lace
    May 11, 2005
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    LOL This is cute. So lighthearted. Thank you for the smile and giggle. Please don't change a thing. Its perfect as it is. Writing is such a wonderful form of expression and a great outlet for the things we all hold inside. I am so glad you have chosen Allpoetry as the place to share your talent. I encourage you to wander around and become familiar with all the wonderful features we have here. There are so many writing groups and contests and even online classes that you can become a part of here at Allpoetry. As a site greeter I would just like to take this opportunity to welcome you to our community of poets and encourage you to check out our latest AllWrite ezine.allpoetry.com:2500/april/published/HomePage
    ♥Christina


  • All4God21
    May 11, 2005
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    Hey Thanks ya'll. See me and my science teacher have an insider. I have really really really skinny arms! And I'm always like look at these guns!! Sorry if it was confusing...

  • Hiding Child
    May 11, 2005
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    I like it the way it is. This was hilarious, please don't change, unlerss it's the last line or sdecond to last, but it's perfectly fine the way it is. Great write.

  • MHaxC
    May 11, 2005
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    The title of this poem immediately made me laugh out loud. I cannot tell if this is about superman or some chunky guy playing with a beach ball or some other guy who is pumping up his arms with steroids. I am actually having a lot of fun trying to figure it out. I have just one question though, how come the borderline of this is a tissue box? All in all a pretty good poem, humorous, confusing, good rhyming, it is good! P.S. I hate those guys on the beach who think they are so awesome with their muscles.