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13 petals on friday rose

Petal one is the smallest
tink, tink, tink
drip, drip, drip
drop, drop, drop
and the blood flower planted
the finger-nail has killed petal one

Petal two is the tallest
tink, tink, tink
drip, drip, drip
drop, drop, drop
and the blood turns white pink
the pin has killed petal two

Petal three is the smartest
think, think, think
drip, drip, drip
drop, drop, drop
and the blood falls on other skin
the vegetable peeler has killed petal three

Petal four is the silliest
tot, tot, tot
drip, drip, drip
drop, drop, drop
and the blood paints the canvas
the steak knife has killed petal four

Petals five and six are twins
tink, tot, tink
drip, drip, drip
drop, drop, drop
and the blood runs freely
the watch has killed petals five and six

Petals 7, 8, and 9 have no spine
tap, tap, tap
drip, drip, drip
drop, drop, drop
and the blood never comes
the nail clippers failed, and still 7, 8, 9 are dead

Petal 10 is the loudest
Shink, Shink, Shink
drip, drip, drip
drop, drop, drop
and the deep blood turns new to rust
the machete has killed petal ten

petals 11 and 12 are the skinniest
kink, kink, kink
dip, drip, drip
drop, drop, drop
and the food turns red and never leaves
the anorexia has killed 11 and 12

there is no doubt that 13 is the loudest
BANG, BANG, BANG
THUD, THUD, THUD
THWAP, THWAP, THWAP
And now the blood is in full bloom
The gun killed the rose on Friday

Author notes

This is actually almost true, I never pulled the trigger but every thing else is the different stages of my depression, I split them into 13, because its and unlucky number and I actually mainly cut but I had anorexia as well and then I wanted to end it all.  I'm still not completely over it
Written May 10th, 2005

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  • gothangel
    June 4, 2005
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    wow, this was a cool poem...it kept me interested the whole time...nice job...you did really well on this poem....keep up the good work and good luck in my contest


  • PsychoDreamer
    May 10, 2005
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    i agree with tiff this is effing awesome! 13 roses .. thats so like imaginative X.x. Good luck dude!
    Nik Vicious


  • InvisibleDrama
    May 10, 2005
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    Mind Blowing

    Oh my god. That was INCREDIBLE. I'm sosorry for the background of this poem, but it was absolutley amazing. Best of luck in the contest.

    -x-Tiff-x-