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Factory Farm




Blank eyes stare beneath

Where a thin red line drips down,

Coagulating








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See PETA.org for a "Meet Your Meat" viewing. You'd be surprised about what goes on at factory farms (where, if you live in America, the majority of your meat comes from).
Written May 10th, 2005

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  • leander Moderators member
    September 23, 2005
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    Well, as said before you surely are able to paint detailed imaged with just a few simple words
    I wish you the best of luck in this contest

    Leander

  • piccola silver member
    September 21, 2005
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    I have two Arabian mares .. I don't like this. Injuries happen; I prefer them to happen to things not so helpless although my mares can do a pretty good bit of damage if called upon.


  • senza
    May 16, 2005
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    Very nice haiku.
    A lot said in so few words amazing huh!
    Lady anairO


  • janejainejayne gold member
    May 10, 2005
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    Good

    Nailed! You said it all. But I find your poetry disturbing. Good, but disturbing. I read several of your Haiku, I am not that familiar with it but you certainly paint a picture with few words.


  • kryspin
    May 10, 2005
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    short and sweet with punching imagery. I like how direct it is yet strangely subtle ( maybe to me! )

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