As thunder echoes my mind starts to stir
Of days long ago at my childhood’s end
Pounding so loud and the angels concur
Still waiting for my broken soul to mend
Feeling the sting as it scratches my skin
Praying against hope that this will end soon
I know only hurt as I pay for my sin
Fall to my knees seeing a battered moon
Bleeding my heart dry afraid of his eyes
Calling out to God or someone to care
Sweat pouring off me screaming out deaf cries
This life I live, I can no longer bear
Every mistake he’s there with my pain
Watching another bruise drive me insane
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Written July 16th, 2002
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Can I just cry and not comment?? Is that okay??
ARGHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!! YOU are too awesome...I can't even speak to you anymore. You're on like a whole different level. How do I even GET on a level??
I'm finished here.
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OMG. Now I see, how this ties into the other piece. Wonderfully. Seemlessly. I am in awe. Separated at birth, siblings found?
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Mari's life hasn't been all roses, no matter how much she states the opposite.
And my dad wasn't always a wonderful guy. His big thing was emotional abuse, but we always feared the physical. He had a hard life and unfortunately took it out on his family.
I like the allusion of the storm as a metaphor for the crap you went through. Not only does that storm set the tone of the poem, but it creates the memories and pace of the poem. Bla, bla, bla, bla. I talk too much.
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Now I read it with different eyes.
I'm happy to know that you are growing in spirit, despite such huge pain. Many people bend, fall to never rise again, but not you
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From a place that I don't like to visit... but in order to grow, I must...
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I think I have only one real dark poem. It is fiction, wrote as an experiement, and man, I can tell you it was quite painful writing that poem.
This one of yours is almost too depressing, I mean this is as a compliment. The pain is deep, like if it had always been there.
As I see no personal category, I'll not make any personal remarks
As for the poem, it is very emotional and well written. Hope to see a 'lighter' one on your page soon, though.
Kisses,
Mari
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