A wife scorned forever
Bereavement has come her way
Casualty came that November 1st day
Death has occurred,
Every passing moment
Fades back to yesterday
Good times for ever gone
Heaven is now where you stay
I love you honey
Just waiting for judgement day
Knowing we will soon be together
Losing you has ended my will to stay
Many people say the pain subsides each day
Not for me, it hurts each new day
Often I have
Prayed God why?
Questions come unanswered
Reacurring memories of me and you
Sadness has taken over my days
Togetherness was all I knew
Unknown to you or me this would happen so fast
Visions of you are still clear in my mind
Wishing you where still here by my side
Xxooxx [ hugs and kisses ]
You will always be missed, now all I can do is
Zzzzz [ dream of what used to be you and me ]
Author notes
THIS IS ACROSTIC FORM IN ABC ORDER .. HARD TO DO..
espically x and z..I could not find a word for x and z..
This is written in memorance of the loss of my husband whom recently passed away..2004..[married 28yrs]
Written May 9th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- Up Down by Darkwell.
800 points, ended July 27, 2008, 32 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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so sad and at the same time so beautiful.
Losing you has ended my will to stay
Many people say the pain subsides each day
Not for me, it hurts each new day
Often I have
Prayed God why?
Questions come unanswered
i feel this an ive felt this way in my own way for other things in the past but i think sometimes we miss the answer when our faith is tested or it comes in a way we didnt think it would so we dont see it later
it must have been awesome for him to have had some body as intelligent an as much in love with him as you are. you were both very lucky i think and i dont think true love is something that should ever go away even if it has to compete with great loss. i dont think a man that loved coulda been selfish and im sure he would want you to be happy even after he was gone. God will put you back together again someday but Gods still got more stuff for you to do here, clearly.
as for this agrostic?
Magnificently
Acknowledged
Sorrow
That
Expresses
Real
Passion
In
Every
Cherished
Example
God Bless
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thank you so much for your comment on my write..and you are right..its been 4 yrs almost..and i do have a reason for being here longer and why i dont know ..but..he would not want to me to suffer in sorrow the rest of my life....how ever long or short it may be..i loved him..i miss him...yet in time we must move on...yet fate its self....which i believe fate changes in each individuals life...only by the power above..sorry ..dont mean to bring my faith in this...thanks for the comment...i love acrostic poetry !!! have a nice contest !!!
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crazychick..thank you for your condolences,,and the applaud on my write..good luck with contest..thanks again..honeydew
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I like this poem.. It makes sense.... I like the background that you used because it goes along with the poem.... This is a emotional poem.... Thanks for entering this contest... I am sorry that you lost the one that you loved but you will see him some day in heven and the lord does these things for a reason...
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Honey, I know, I got so tired of hearing people tell me that it got better with time. Time sucks!!! And my love still has not diminished one bit. Though I have learn to live with the pain better than I used to.
I do wish you a gentle healing.
Rene' -
Wow. This is beautifully sad. I am sorry about your husband. Losing a love is hard. Best of wishes to you.
You did an awesome job here
Thank you for sharing, and good luck
~Kat -
Wonderful tear turning piece
I'm truly sorry for your loss, Good luck and best wishes
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I am sorry to hear about your husband.Great job on this and good luck in my contest.
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a sad and thought provoking poem! great job and good luck in the contest!
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Interesting poem and good used abc acrostic style. Nice and touching poem story. Good luck in contest.
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awww what a sad and beautiful poem x It runs really smoothly and is soo sweeT... You show your emotions beautifully and really wow that's gorgeous x
Nice write hun x Keep it up x And good luck in my contest x Thanx also for going by all my rules-it means a lot to me x
Luv Lou
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I love the words and the background.thanks for appreciating my work.take care
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this was a great write, im sure this was quite a challenge, but it all flowed so well. i loved what you did with the X and the Z's.. very creative. i am sorry you went throught this, its always hard losing a loved one of so long. thank you for entering my contest. good luck. take care.
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I like this. I think that you did a nice job, and I love the background picture, though I think you should come up with something more creative for X and Z it is a very lovely piece, but that xxxxoooxxx and zzzzzzzzzz take away from it greatly. It seems more like a wim than something that took time.
Just my opinion,
Criss -
freewill...thanks for your comment on my write..it is very personal..yet I wanted to share my feelings ..I recently lost my husband of 28 yrs..I tend to write alot of poems for or about him ..thanks again
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wow i love thses acrostic types in the a-z form and this is no exception. It is deeply moving and personal. great job
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This is such a moving piece.I am truely sorry for your loss.
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gold medal worthy
a beauty for sure! The poignacy express is the joy of loss not the sad goodbye, thankyou. the background is as flawless as the poem. -
Inspiration and incredible.
This was definetly hard to do but you took it and made it work out so well. This is one incredible write and I salute you for it. -
What I liked: the repetition works, the descriptions were enthralling, and it was a fun read.
What I didn't like: I don't think the ending does the rest of the poem justice. -
Thank you so much for the gold..I saw your contest and decided to enter never did I think this would win 1st place ..thanks so much..honeydew...
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jennifer...thanks for the congrads!!
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Congratulations on your win of your GOLD TROPHY, a very deserving win.
Jennifer
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lyna05...thank you for your comment on my poem...i find myself writing alot about him..i have lost alot of loved ones in my life..a son ,a father,father in law, mother in law,grand parents,friends, but worst of all was the passing of my husband of 28yrs together just 6 months ago..thks again..honeydew
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Wonderful Work Keep It Up
I am so sorry for your loss if you ever need to talk I am here for you. I love your poem it is so sweet and so wonderful. I really enjoyed reading it. The way it all flows together is amazing and wonderful also. Great job and best of luck in the contest. -
ha, yeah, x and z are always hard in abc acrostics. great write though! i love acrostics. it's sweet and sooo sad! i'm soo sorry for your loss. and you're right, it doesnt get better. what's to get better?! anyways, great job!
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awww..this was soo good.. i loved it.. im so sorrry you lost him.. but he inspires you some beautiful poems.. this was great... thanks for entering.. xoxo stac
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Such a beautiful Acrostic of the loss you are feeling for your Husband, it must be devastating, My heart goes out to you.
Jennifer
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daedal labyriath.. thank you for your comment..and prayers..the format is called acrostic.. it is sometimes hard to convey exactly what you want to say and make sence..in alphabetical form..try this one time..it is difficult
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truly heartfelt. great job in conveying what you feel, especially through this unusual format.
though blessed with an over-active imagination, still i can only imagine the horror and emptiness that would exist should i (dear God, forbid) lose the one whom i love with a love surpassing all reason - life, i fear, would be at an impasse for me.
i'm so sorry for your loss and commend you on continuing on... and i'll be sure to send up a few prayers for your continued comfort.
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So sorry for your loss ..my children often tell me ..how strong you are [mom ]..but really I hide alot..they suffer the loss of their dad too..people always have encouraging words but deep inside the hurt of lossing a soul mate..is a pain that fills your heart and never seems to end..god bless you as you go about your days without your loved one..its very difficult but remember as I always do.. he would want you to go on..it makes it a bit easier..write of your love for him in poetry..it hurts but in a way it helps me..I am letting others fell my pain for it is hard to go through alone..plus I feel a connection like he sees what I write and how I miss and love him..my codolences to you for I lnow what you also are going through..god bless..take care and bring out that pen and write!!
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So touching
Awwww this is so touching and heart warming/heart felt!! I can relate to all you have to say here as I just lost my fiance' a few months ago...someone said to me that they thought all my tears were dried up and I was like umm no, it comes every single day...I had more tears then I even knew...the pain of the loss of our loved one is so extreme and it seems never ending...I know I miss mine so much and have too wrote some in memory to him....beautiful write here, just beautiful!!! 's to you for your loss as I know your pain friend.
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