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Everything wrong

You asked what was wrong I smiled and said Nothing
Then I turned around and whispered everything
Every one thinks there is nothing wrong
Cause we say there isn't anything but there is
We all hold it deep inside us bottled up
We cant control it any longer I am frightened that
I will attack someone I love deep down
The thought of harming someone so dear makes me sick
I start to think of awful things coming to my mind
I try to block them from coming in
but they keep coming in i cant get away they are taking my like
The things that i call THEY are the razors baring down into my skin
The clean crisp feel is to painless I do it again
and again and again,again,again,again no i say
I stop blood dripping on the floor
I stop and wonder how can someone do this to their self
Then the answer was in front of me
Its my fault i didn't get help when i should have
You asked what was wrong I smiled and said Nothing
Then I turned around and whispered everything

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Written May 9th, 2005

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  • MiseriaCantare13
    February 6, 2006
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    Yes, well, Monica is back and I still love this poem. Sad thing is, when 9th grade started...so did the cutting again. But I am currently going to the coolest therapist, so...slowly but surely...


  • -Silent-Tears-
    November 11, 2005
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    very emotional... i hope that things will get better for you soon.. you have great talent keep writing

  • Hiei The Killer
    October 24, 2005
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    This one is amazing. You truly know what it's like.

  • Johnny Depp Freak
    July 9, 2005
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    Thank you very much i appreciate the comment so far i have not cut for 6months now i am doing really good so i hope you comtinue in your way to stop as well, well thanks again see ya around bye bye DeadlyAngel


  • AngelFire2008
    July 8, 2005
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    This is very good! I love it! I'm also a cutter, so I know how you feel, and I was doing really good too not cutting and it had been like months, but then I gave in and did it not too long ago, but that was going to be my last and I'm going to stop! And I'm proud of you that you haven't cut for about 3 or 4 months, please don't do it anymore! But this is a very good write and I really love it. Your very talented! Keep writing!
    Love always,
    Heather

  • Johnny Depp Freak
    June 9, 2005
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    thanks for the comment but i also havent cut for about 3 months going on 4 stay strong girl DeadlyAngel

  • MiseriaCantare13
    May 10, 2005
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    gorgeous! I love it. I feel like this so often, but I HAVEN'T CUT IN ABOUT A MONTH!!! YAY!! Anyway, beautiful rhythm. I absolutely love your work. Wonderful write, so emotional.

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