Your demented lies
Will hurt me no more
The pain you've put me though
Will soon subside
Eventually I will no longer
Want to die.
I can't be with you
If all your going to do
Is bring me down
I don't want to feel
Worthless and used
All the time.
I know you're using me
And I know it's not right
I don't comprehend
Why you can not see
The person inside.
All you see
Is a girl you wanna bang
I'm tired of being treated
Like your personal toy
I am human too
And deserve to be treated so.
I hope you know
You're a prick
and I hate you.
Author notes
About one of my friends. He was my best friend and I made the unforgiven mistake of sleeping with him so now he treats me like crap.
I commented on Sweet Stargazer's poem.
Written May 9th, 2005
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Powerful write, i really like this one. And for the record, prick is not a bad word and thats the worst one i saw in this whole thing. Great write!
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I LOVED THE BEAT AND RYTHEM IN THIS GREAT JOB!
*CARRIE
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Well sorry i don't see how the word in the last line should appear "bunny" because where i'm from its not a cuss word but whatever your contest
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Well the second to last line I see the word "bunny" that is what is shows for me if it is swearing. I'm sorry. It was good.
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Where is the swearing?
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sorry, I just noticed some swearing...I'm going to have to remove this. I'm sorry.
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A WONDERFUL poem
Well this was so sad and heartfelt. It was full of emotion. I do hope things have gotten better for you. Best of luck in the contest.
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THis is really saying alot. I like it alot. I love the last line the most, it really leaves you with a shake
great job!
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Those things suck they really do I see that you let out much of your feeling on the poem you did a great job on your poem. I am sorry to here that things have been so hard on you but maybe this is the way thing where mint to be, hope all is well
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That a way to go, the extent to which holding back has seemingly brought this barrage out, and with a hellish fury! liked this a lot!
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It is a big step we take when we give ourselves to a man...too often we do so prematurely and end up with deep regrets. The one thing that should belong to the Right One...is way too often taken from us for the conquest. Strong write. Well done.
Sam
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I can relate to this. The feeling of being used. Maybe not in that way. Well yeah... even in that way. Good job! This was definitely deep. Best of luck to you in the contest. Love and hugs...
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Well written poem
Wow...quite the experience. It was deep, and I could really feel it.
Thank you for entering my first contest!
Krista
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