Haughty
Solitary
Spears fish from shallow marsh
Slow wing beats in flight; neck "S" curved
Stately
Author notes
Another heron cinquain. 
This bird has a story that I hope to tell in the future, but for now, this OLD heron needed something. I saw one just like this, he looked like a grandpa. 
Cheryl 
Cheers!!
Written May 9th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- Cinquain Grab Bag by Almighty Aphrodite.
300 points, ended May 10, 2005, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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Well, that picture sure does look haughty! LOL Great description.
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Herons walk with just that stateliness. Last summer I had the opportunity of watching one fishing at the riverbank, as I sat in my father's garden only 30 yards away. He saw me, I watched him, for about half an hour. Your poem is very well done.
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That heron picture doesn't just look like any old grandpa...that looks like my grandpa!
lol
The heron is a dignified creature, although I don't see too many of them migrating around these parts I think this particular bird can be a little narcissistic too, though... but they are a wonder to look at, in travels I've seen a couple here and there, face to face. This was a succinct, wonderfully composed cinquain. And I just noticed that you are the one who the little birdie emoticon was made for. Do you think AP will make me one on my birthday? 
Lovely write. Good luck to you in the contest!
Many blessings,
Raven Aurora
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Very well done my friend! I absolutely loved the picture that you have chosen... it is very cute and I do agree it does look like a grandpa! LOL
S~
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This was a wonderfully composed cinquain!! It is well written and very well presented. Best wishes in the contest, you've done a wonderful job.
Sam
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that was great. and really creative. keep up the great writing
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That's pretty sweet.
You succeeded in capturing the moment of a heron's superficial character. -
stunning
I enjoyed this very much
They rather have the look of an old and dusty Barrister 
Rumpole of the Bailey, spring to mind. Sorry you are probably not familiar with him, but it was a televison programme. Great likeness
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I love your little bird in the comments section!
I do so love the form and I know how you love birds, and this was a treat.
best of luck to you in the contest
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crystaldust 10-05-05 21:59
Cheryl: I think your Blue Heron would love this cinquain, I mean really laugh with enjoyment at it. It is perfection and I love it. Hope you win with him. Heaps of luck. Joy
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It is a magnificent bird. I've always marveled at their patience and hunting skill. Your piece describes it perfectly in just sixteen words.
Sincerely,
Leo Long -
Chery this bird really is stately. The way the feather drape around it's body reminds me of the top coats men wore in the 19th century. All we need to do is put a top hat on him for a caricature personna. They are very regal looking and I'm always so amazed at how still they can be. The alliteration in your Cinquain is musical. Karen
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I see the baldish noggin and the hint of a beard, plus the wisdom of the elderly gentleman in this pic...so yeah, a grandpa Heron it is...
Nice Cinquain, and best of luck in this one.
s,
Del -
this is a beautiful cinquan. it has the feel of haiku - a certain serenity that comes when speaking of nature and her creatures.
good luck in the contest!
illusions -
This is a wonderful tribute to the Great Blue Heron. He is so beautiful. I can't wait to read the story.
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How does look a bird that looks like a grandpa?
This cinquain is very good Cheryl! I'm happy you have found time to write a cinquain, I always enjoy reading your feather's cianquains
Kisses,
Mari
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