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cavern of lust

kiss the crevice
with trembling lips,
closed eyes,
and an
open mind.
floods
do not
require
an
audience

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Written May 9th, 2005

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  • ficklefeather
    August 5, 2005
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    Oh. Good. Lord. That. Was. Brilliant. *crosses legs the other way, this time*


  • Miykie
    July 4, 2005
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    My wading bib is oh so thirsty right now...Great vignette...Now I must pounce into the night to actualize this poem for me, on your behalf of course Great write!


  • June 27, 2005
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    Whoa, so many interpetations left to the mind here. Closed Eyes and open minds (which I can see was a big hit here), so I must comment. Ok well I'll just play dumb, in the mind we are left wander and in our love we find! Take care Ken

  • amberline
    June 22, 2005
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    sensual, beautiful

    well done...especially i like the open mind thing...lol...just enough told and the rest left to be imagined.


  • natari gold member
    June 4, 2005
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    Excellent

    This was a stunning write. The words just give the image of such sheer hesitant yet exploration of thought and love.I really like this and it made me go to a place I haven't been in a while.

  • Eric Nunnally
    May 28, 2005
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    smile

    ha!ha! nice erotic piece. simple and evocative!

  • Stella Shall
    May 28, 2005
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    Fantastic

    I just love this poem I love short pieces that just slam the nail straight into the wall.


  • sodancewithsoda
    May 22, 2005
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    wow... despite the minimal words, i KNEW what you were talking about i love it so much, galing ng pag ka construct, IMO kakaiba!! *claps and claps and claps* floods don't require an audience, indeed


  • SpydurPoet gold member
    May 20, 2005
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    Wow. This was like a desperate and forlorn suspiration. Such a beautiful, beautiful poem. I absolutely loved it. Write on. ~*~SpydurPoet~*~


  • Trellis
    May 17, 2005
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    Very different. Loved the brevity and your imagination! Great job!


  • Daoine
    May 16, 2005
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    Powerfully painted heat, very erotic. It doesn't say too much but just enough to 'wet' the reader's imagination.
    Perfectly done.

  • Dave AL
    May 14, 2005
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    I didn't really take it as "adult". It could have applied to anything else as well. The last part was quite striking, and hilarious, too. In such a short piece, passion is very sound. ;-)

  • Whisper
    May 10, 2005
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    Simplistically delicious, painting a definitive picture, while still expanding thoughts without limitations...very inventive piece!


  • Touchof1der silver member
    May 10, 2005
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    Closed eyes and open mind... I like that line. That could apply to so many things really. It takes an open mind to explore many avenues in life. This is short but thought provoking. Nice work.
    ♥ Kimberly


  • May 9, 2005
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    hmmmm...i like...good job...i think some of the best erotica...doesn't say stuff out right....it leaves subtle hints and smoothe words...all very poetic....much better than just stating the facts...lol...well done


  • Marcy Anna
    May 9, 2005
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    wow, vivid pictures! Very erotic to me, nice job I think I'll bookmark this piece.

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