Surrounded by
mirrors of love,
there sits an angel
pure and pristine,
untouched by worldly sadism,
One by one,
the mirrors fall out
into pieces…
now, mirroring
the icy cold stare
of a statue
drenched in blood,
Her stillness questioning
every moment of truth,
“Am I betraying or being betrayed?”
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Written May 9th, 2005
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excellent!
Beautiful!!
Surrounded by
mirrors of love,
there sits an angel
pure and pristine,
untouched by worldly sadism,
I was really touched by these lines.
Great job........ -
this is a nice piece ...i love the way concieved 'n unfolded the poem..it is well written right from the start ...but i feel u could have written even more better ..had u poured more intense feelings in it.. it would have just Awesome (just a critique) ....I wish u luck for writiing a beautiful poem..even better than this...good luck..
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wow! this is an excellent piece!!!! i enjoyed reading it!
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Nobody noticed the lines "now, mirroring/ the icy cold stare/ of a statue/ drenched in blood"? I think we've got a very strong imagery there, and a much poignant part of the poem. I'm trying to work that out and make various interpretations.
The ending is very deep and thought-provoking, but I think you've already been told that. Overall, very much a poem one wouldn't regret wasting their time trying to interpret. Kudos to you for that.
Take care,
Mandy
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Deep and Excellent!!!
Apurva, Deep girl this one is real deep. You certainly make the reader sit up and use his head to find out what you are saying and it is not all that easy to, reading just once. But the way you end it with that question, that is a stunner for sure.
Love from Coimbatore - Uncle Joel -
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Amazing, "am I betraying or being betrayed?" very powerful question and I think it tops off a great poem from the begining. Keep up the wonderfull writing. Blessed be
*Janelle ELise* -
Nice poem, I really enjoyed it.
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i really enjoyed reading this piece, its really good
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Pretty neat, I liked the sound of it all and the imagery provided. The final lines are very effective, so props for your poem
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Great
For some reason I envisioned an statue of an angel in a cemetary? This is a good one to allow imagination to creep in allows the reader to come to their own conclusions, like poetry like this, very good job! -
Good read
I will have to reread this several times. The imagery is very strong, but the tense shifts are different. The idea of within without and the reflection of self to dual image is a good twist. -
I really like this poem it is so well written. Well keep up the great work and hope to hear from you again.
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3 stars ***
oye... thank god you write.. i thought you lost your personal helicon... lol.. by the way.. back with a bang... yeah..
... such a nice and creepy poem to come back with.... but its always good to read you aditi... just keep writing ( and dare u not messege me again, i will come there and boo you ) ..lol.. just keep it up my dear friend.. take cares and have a nice time... your humble little friend... 
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'Am I betraying or being betrayed?”'-Apurva this line in particular is really powerful -for me it kind of says it all-
this poem sets the mind thinking and that is something I enjoy most -it has been written very well-it leaves the reader with the desired effect -
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