You made me out of
Wood and dirt, air and fire
Then turned me into
An endangered tiger
And as Oedipus and
Achilles both will agree
You sucked the soul
Through the heart of me.
And somehow, now, it makes perfect sense
Letting go of my future, in the past tense.
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Written May 8th, 2005
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half of me wants to write something clever (you know, puppy references, or something about a mother's grip on her son's heal), but that doesn;t seem right for some reason, so I'll just say that raging about our glorious vulnerabilities strikes me as about the most appropriate kind of poetry we can write.
Well done,
Brian -
This is a beautifully written piece. And the image is very nice also.
Criss -
great photo Horus.
It is nice to see you get a bit personal every once in a while. Loved the flow and I have to say you are one of the VERY few poets on this sight that can rhyme with talent lol. enjoyable read! -
Dear Julie, perhaps
if you've read Oedipus,
or the Illiad, or you were informed
about my context and syntax
you'd get it, it's an ironic bit of wit.
where were you in 9th grade english lit?
Oh, I see,
"they are weak, and he is strong"...
I see, jesus doesn't want you to
be literate, splendid.
I mean for the love of god,
even my six year old has read
Homer, and no I'm not talking
about the Simpsons.
Edited on May 08, 5:17 p.m. because ''. -
youve packed quite a lot into this little piece.
i love the last line.
cool stuff
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I'm sorry to say that I don't understand this poem, so I'm not quite sure how to comment, the picture doesn't seem to make sense with the poem.... perhaps I'm just a bit off today. I didn't want to waste your points though, sorry for nothing constructive..... -
Yeah, this is a pretty nifty poem. I love the mythical allusions, the rhyme, and the bit of personality. What is also quite nice is the picture. Good job.
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