She sits up nights
in blazing moonlight
seldom sleeping…
Wishing
Waiting
Wondering
If dreams really do come true
She collects
shooting stars
and sunbeams
sweeping out the shadows
with little pieces of hope
fallen
from heaven.
She’s awake again:
Hot and troubled
sipping iced tea
singing soothing lullaby’s
to a fantasy family.
Time drips upon her melody
trickles frigid truth
across her barren breasts
She weeps
Mourns
Grieves
For all the empty nights
spent
rocking an empty cradle
in the midnight madness.
And then
she dares to dream again.
Patricia Gibson-Williams
May 7, 2005
Author notes
I chose choice number 9
I guess in a way it really is about "Unfulfilled Melodies"
Also I commented on "Eyes Closed" by Josie and I hope to comment on more. Patti
Written May 7th, 2005
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- Make Me Feel! by aDozenRoses.
300 points, ended May 11, 2005, 4 entries
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Such a beauty in this one...lovely even. The word usage and flow...great! I haven't seen many poems with that layout, so it was cool to see something different...I liked this a lot! Goodluck in my contest!
p.s. good job at following my rules
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This was realy good, I'm not too used to this style but the flow was awesome.
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I really like this, I found it to be very similar to my sleeping patterns lol. Great work, and the best of luck to you in the conest, dear
~Smidge~
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My husband and I have been trying to have children for years. We've been seeing a doctor for awhile and things are progressing, but now we're getting older and it's harder to hold onto hope. I know we need to count our blessings and one of them is that we do still have hope, but around mother's day that's really hard. Especially when you're ordering fertility drugs and the ditz on the phone tells you to have a happy mother's day, or your neice who knows what you've been going thru starts telling you how much she loves mother's day and how she's already been getting cards and gifts from her toddlers. I've always wanted children and I never would have imagined that I'd reach even 30 without them, but that has long since passed... I wonder if the longing for them ever will, and I pray that I don't have live without ever seeing my child's smile. Thank you for commenting on my poem. Patti
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very lovely- how she fades away in her thoughts and wondering about the beauty of dreams.
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Haunting
This has a haunting beauty to it and is a fine write. I can picture this childless woman doing just this. And I can also see the resident in the nursing home that I used to watch rock and sing to a phantom child. -
This is so sad! Did the protagonist in this poem lose a baby or never meet someone who could provide her with one? This poem was very relative to me. I am too young to have kids but i often long for a baby when i see mothers and their strollers. Toddlers make me sad....
All the best
Arielle
The One and Only -
heart opening
So strong and lonely. This type of feeling controls and engulfs a soul if you allow it to.
My Best
Amanda -
amazing
omg! this is so just wow! that end hits hard.. this is an amazing piece of work! great write! -
This brings back memories, a well written piece and gets to the heart strings. She dares to dream again, still with hope and a happy ending.
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