Afternoon sunlight trickles down
by the window and even the drapes
can't help but forget their weight,
dancing in the golden glow pouring in.
Everything is resting in the arms of
fore-eve, rocking back and forth in her
generous, though transient embrace.
Hushed is the world, cat-napping earth.
I drink of these now unguarded whispers:
Just as the clouds draw in the rain and
knit thunderstorms in their depths;
like the rolling waves of the open sea,
marvelous and molding; just as the
never-ending stars strike wonder-chords
on the strings of my soul; in the way
polished stones fill the hollow of your hand,
quiet perfection; the same way the
rigorous winds relentlessly chase the
sands unto the ends of the world--
these are the ways I wish to be loved by you.
Unquestionable in my mind now is this
very truth: I cannot lie to you anymore.
What I wish to say is this: you are my
xylem, drawing new life into my limbs.
You’ve made me a captive. I am lost in your
zucchini eyes and precious midnight hair.
Author notes
My original title was "How to Use 'Zucchini' in Poetry in the Proper Context 101". I had also considered "Because youllneverknow Dared Me, Dummy". 
In case you didn't notice, this is an alphabetic acrostic.
Written May 6th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- Prewrites Shall Reign by DeadlyPoetic88.
600 points, ended March 31, 2008, 6 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Hushed is the world, cat-napping earth
I loved that line. I thought that the personification was at times subtle, but very good. I loved how you said the earth was cat napping. I feel like it is that way at times.
I love the overall feel of this poem. It was nice. I enjoyed this very much. The flow was perfect!!
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Beginning with z? Now that would be cool...and it sounds just like you
And of course it's raw zucchini, silly. Thank you for your perpetual encouragment-- it means much.
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I most certainly did enjoy the challenge! I probably would never have even attempted such a thing were it not for you.
So, if I deserve an applause so do you! Oh, and if you need some extra points for the contest, don't hesitate to ask-- I'm overflowing with them at the moment.
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AP bio test? Good luck with that! Thanks for your wonderful comment...I'm thrilled you liked this so much. I've rearranged that line per your suggestion (it was the line that bothered me the most in writing/editing). I appreciate you taking the time to tell me what you thought of this. God bless and take care, Sim.
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Nice job using the word xylem! I have the AP bio test tomorrow so I've been studying plant transport... I love how you personified the light and the earth and the drapes and all that good stuff... You have such amazing imagery. And your acrostic had amazing flow that I don't think I could ever achieve. Really, I'm speechless. If I quoted all the lines that are my favorite I would have to copy and paste the whole thing, so I won't. The only suggestion I have is that the line "generous, warm, fleeting, soft embrace." feels a little wordy so I would eliminate just one of the adjectives. Other than that, superb write! Once again, if I had an applause left, I would use it. Man, I've been saying that so much today! Ah well, I'll just catch all you talented people tomorrow!
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The last title was perfect but I believe you've choosen a winner. Ah! I LOVE this piece! It's just...perfect. lol There's not one thing wrong with it! BAH! I'm left speechless at the talent. Mine's not even close to this one. It must have taken a while. Hope you enjoyed the challenge. I know I did. Then it drained me and then I got in a fight with my love and BAM! I'm back! But they're all pathetically sad pieces. YAY! Anyways...I'd applaud but I need the points for the contest. Hope you understand.
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I've always wanted to do one of these, but backwards beginning with Z. lol, but that's just me...
This is quite well done, considering the framework it is done in. "Zucchini eyes" is quite inventive, although I'm wondering if it is raw zucchini or fried?
Sim, keep up the good work. I truly love to see your talent coming through.
peace
doug
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