Tears on the pillow
Blood on the pin
Control through pain
Can't hold it within.
Did the right thing
Asked for the aid
Ignored by them all
Except for the blade.
If you pay no attention
It will just go away
Theory of the ignorant
Fills with dismay.
They see the marks
Just like before
But if disregarded
It won't be anymore.
Sliced the skin
Forced to feel
Empty inside
Use it to deal.
Remember the fear
Remember the hate
Remember the pain
Now its too late.
Scratched in the skin
Red and so scary
Remnant of the hurt
So hard to carry.
Know its dreadful
No longer care
No one to talk to
Filled with despair.
Suffering alone
Bleeding to cry
Slowly engraved
One word, 'Die'.
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Written May 6th, 2005
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very nice!
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... nice poem.. definitly heart felt and emotional, you showed your pain and you screamed it from the page.. well done
thanks for entering!
Abused
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WOAA...O gosh, this is a wonderfull write!! You are an awesome artist! Your words are greatly chosen...I just love the whole write!
Keep up the good work!!
You certainly got my applause!
Blessed Be
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excellent poem
What a very powerful and emotional write. Wow is all I can say. Just excellent, good luck in the contest
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Sounds like you wrote from experiance I like it alot it tells truth in feeling
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amazing
wow. there is severe emotion in this. i do have some advice for whoever this poem is about. there is no point in life. so whats the point in death? live it up and have fun! live to smile! its taken me a lot of time to think that up, so i hope it helps you too. but i love how your poems ending actually made sense!!!!! mine never do!! this poem flows sooo well!! great write! -
trey bien
now this is a kick ass ..... not to sound offendingly childish but thats how i feel.... if there was ever a poem to describe the feelings of a cutter i believe this is it... BRAVO
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This is really great work. Not many people can express these feelings you have revealed with the dark yet flowing grace that you've shown. You have wonderful talent.
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This is great. The words flow so easily, and the rhyming doesn't get into the way of anything. If you like these poems, read my Kill Me. I think you'd enjoy it as it mirrors what you feel in this one.
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I can appricate that your words fit so nicely together, mine do not. The only thing is that you may have over used the word remember, but this is also don't on purpose..so yeah. the last stanza is simply amazing....
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The beat you have on here is hypnotic, eerie. Like short breaths, or a heatbeat...The rhyming was great the majority of the time. I LOVED the last stanza, "Suffering alone
Bleeding to cry / Slowly engraved / One word, 'Die'". It was so beautiful!
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Wow!! This poem is totally awesome! I love the flow and the rhymes are great!! I also really love the size of each of the stanzas. The shortness just makes it better!!!! I loved the lines:
Ignored by them all
Except for the blade.
Awesome, awesome, awesome, awesome!! I really loved this one. I will bookmark it and give you an applause!!! -
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wow, i dont know where to even begin, its so powerful and emotional and just all out,i love it so much, and i can so relate to it. wow, this is an awesome write, you have great potential i think in writing, i am definitly gona bookmark this and and i love a lot of your poetry, welcome to my favorites list. pen on!!
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Self harm seems unproductive but that what the monster in my head thinks he would get more out of watching the sick fuck
I liked the simple form of this it started ran its course and finished well done
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Ooh. Nice. Especially the last stanza. I feel guilty about pointing out that spelling mistake in your contest now, but hey, it made me check your poetry out, and I'm glad that I did. Good job. Strikes a few chords... Only thing I can really criticise is that 'scary' and 'carry' don't rhyme as well as the other rhyming couplets in it. Perhaps
"Scratched in the skin
The violent red tear
Remnant of the hurt
So hard to bear"
Though of course, it could then be taken as tear as in 'tears we cry' rather than tear as in 'rip and tear'.
Regardless, I liked your poem a lot. Keep writing. -
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OOOOOOOOHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!! Excuse me as I shake in my boots. LOL!!!! Like you'd dare hit me! Cause you know if you did I would beat the holy hell out of you. -
Ruthless, this poem has potential. It's cool I love it like usual. You do however, need to CHEER THE FUCK UP, or I'll um.... Kick your ass
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*bookmarks this poem* Oh look, it's a poem just for me! I think this is one of my favorite poems... ever. It's just so true of how it feels! And I love it.
~Stormy~
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