A ghostly love I'll have for you
always with discretion...
Unseen, untouched, unwanted too,
but thriving in perfection~
A ghostly love can survive,
because it can't be shown
No mortal hand can destroy
what is never known~
As a ghost I will prepare
to face a brand new day
Nothing to prove,nothing to gain
as is the ghostly way~
So rest your mind,close your heart
Your ghost seeks no more
to partake of the mortal man
or a love that's not in store~
As a ghost I will live
to my own life's content
Untouched,unseen, unwanted
as it was always meant~
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Written November 13th, 2002
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LOVE IT LOVE IT LOVE IT LOVE IT LOVE IT LOVE IT!!!!!
It's so beautiful. I'm sad. Beautifully done dear. Miss you. Keep it up. -
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This is very good, i enjoyed reading it.It has this broken love kind of feel. I absolutely love it -
It made me think of an elderly couple in which one has died and the other is still in love and although I dont think that was the point thats what this poem opened my mind into and It made me sad because today we were talking about my great grandma who doesnt want to go to a nursing home because she wont be able to take her dead husbands pictures with her and she feels as if her husband is with her when she has the pictures and its so sad because as we get older the people we love do die and its like a ghostly love thats eternally there especially with elderly people.
Great write Sis, made me think!
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Oh, wow, I love this one, and it's the first one I have read of your's. I dunno if read correctly, but I felt this person who's love is very strong and very deep, is held inside. So sad, but beautiful. I really enjoyed reading. :o)
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This one is lonley. :-(
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absolutely stunning. well done and lovely. 'As a ghost i will live
to my own life's content
Untouched,unseen, unwanted
as it was always meant'
fabulouse ending *sighs* -
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This is fabulous. It's bittersweet and truthful. We should all learn and grow from your words. There is much to be said and much pain to feel. Lovely write my dear. -
excellent
Seems to me we ALL could take a little advice from that
ghost. And by the way...the male ghost looks exactally
like one of my friends...uncanny...
Hugs and love
Eddy -
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Love how you said ' No mortal hand can destoy' yes mortals always destro things in the end they hear a tiny whisper of your dreams and they turn it into a nightmare!
((((((huggies))))))
Brianna -
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''A ghostly love can survive,
because it won't be shown
No mortal hand can destroy
what is never known''
love those lines!!! ...This is so fantastic Susan..I love the concept of still being with that special someone on the other side...this would make a wonderful novel!!! Superb write!!!!! -
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This is beautiful in it's depth and mystique. It has a lonely quality to it, haunting and sensual. I like it a lot.
Dee -
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How hauntingly beautiful this is,so sad and yet sweet...lovely write Susan....regards Janetxx -
excellent
Lovely, yet lonely feeling in this.
I can relate, very fine work.
The ending lines are powerful.
RR -
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Words have no expression for how beautiful this is. -
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Oh this is beautiful...I think I know a ghostly love myself. :)
This poem made me sigh...somewhere between happiness and sadness. Wonderful work Susan :)
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excellent
Susan, this is so perfect. It captues the romance in us all. Chris. -
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oooh I really liked this piece,,
beautifully wistful, sad, happy.....full of mixed emotions in a way...
just loved it....
Well penned.
Ann -
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Myself hon, I don't feel very ghostly, but open and searching for love. Come out little ghostly love from wherever you are and we will dance among the stars. Bill -
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So hauntingly beautiful...Love is the one thing that survives even after death...I really like this one alot..gave me shivers...Love ya, Rowan -
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Ah Susan... This is deep and haunting.. Very well done sis...
Hope your feeling well..
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Thanks all of you
Maureen thanks for pointing out the error lol
Corrected
Susan~~~~ -
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Agree with Maureen it has this complexity but is still a beautifully written piece -tj- -
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Yes, a ghostly love indeed. Perfect...Beautiful hun and makes me even more ;( so thank you soooo much, lol...Just teasing, I do know this feeling though....Wonderful write as always, love you...~ Ce -
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This was different Susan beautifuly sad like trying to love at distance to keep from failure and heartache from imperfections. Or the letting of one down being afraid to reach out being a ghost afraid.....to be hurt.....mess up but loving inside...Something like that right hon???Hugs and love,Sherry
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Very interesting poem! Why a ghostly love? Why shouldn't the man who is loved know that he is loved? So many questions. Shows what a good poet you are...leaving the readers to make up their own minds about the intent of your poem. Enjoyed the mystery...very nicely done!
first line..a ghostly [love]
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Love Ya,
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So lovely, Susan. I see a double entrendre, too. In the whole piece, yes haunting, yet desirous. Oh to know that ghostly affection. The chill at the back of the neck as he moves past. This was so romantic a thought. Wonderful picture. And how creative you are.
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As a ghost i will live
to my own life's content
Untouched,unseen, unwanted
as it was always meant~
Ouch these words were a smack in the face ending! Love is meant to be shared maybe not always in the way we seek......sigh -
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oh Susan...how haunting and beautiful (i felt a little sadness but i dunno it might just be me)
i just love this picture with it...where do you find them???
hugs and love hun...Dee
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