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my dad

my dads been there
shown hes care
treated him bad
made him feel sad
don,t think i have been fair


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Written May 6th, 2005

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  • Prince Charming
    May 7, 2005
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    What a lot of emotion hidden in those few lines. The love is showed in your words. Your lines said it all:
    my dads been there
    shown hes care
    treated him bad
    made him feel sad
    He's always there for you to care. To understand and be there for you. The other lines tell how deep his love for you is It hurts him when you treated him bad. A great uplifting love between a daughter and her dad a fantastic dedication Something that absolute makes your dad very happy and very proud
    Fantastic entry to the challenge
    Hugs Herman