Here I am strong, standing so tall
beating after beating, fall after fall
no one to comfort me or hear my cries
my spirit broken down yet I will arise!
All this world's hurt that has ripped me apart
That's left me bleeding, crying from the heart
but I won't look back to see the past
one foot in front of the other I will surpass!
I'll not let this world take away my joy
the evil ways of many a deceptive ploy
I'll take back what belongs to me
my respect, my heart and my dignity!
I will forever keep reaching for the stars
love myself and help try to heal these scars
step right up on top, use this pain as a stone
The most beautiful contradiction this world has ever known!
Author notes
Written May 6th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- Feminine Charms by bonjourbunnie.
700 points, ended May 8, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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I like it, especially the rhyme scheme. I've never been very talented at keeping the rhythm that rhymed pieces need, so I appreciate well done ones.
This doesn't really fit the mood that I wanted to see with this contest. However, it does do a wonderful job at portraying the spirit of a woman, and I love that you thought to enter this into a contest about women.
Thank you for entering, and good luck -
Again, from the heart...pouring out from within....always better to create beauty from uglyness....stronger persons rise from adversity......love it.
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true and sensitive
what a way to se life! An inspiration to losing person. well coceived -
WOW!!
This is beautiful, i'd have to say this poem fits my mood right about now, and I almost broke down in tears after reading this. It's amazing, excellent write, and good luck in the contest!!
~WC-10
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powerful
You go!!! This is a very beautiful piece in rhyme, meter, and emotion subject.I too have tried to move forward after many mistakes of my youth, and have finally on most days stand tall and not let the mention of my past take me back to where I once was. Bravo for you. Jacki
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Beautiful Lena i love you! I love this...and..wow..awesome and awesome more!! i don't know what to say except i love you and stay beautiful ::huggles::
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Good.
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ooh, lol... most times I don't like poetry with the aabb scheme, but this one is good! It's not this strained as most poems with this scheme... I like the words u used, you can see there is thought about stone and contradiction
lol
Amaris -
Great!
I've always admire you because I see you pen it out, all your emotions within, on how you feel pain my dear friend, but always you arise and stand firm, and keep on keeping on!
I love ya, and thanks for sharing you!
-Timothy The Poetic Weaver
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I am not in an abusive situation I have long surpassed that stage in my life this is a summary of all the pain I have come across in this life and how I have mannaged to no matter what rise above it and stand stronger each time. It is only by the grace of God I found these wings. thank you for taking the time to read and comment
huggles
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Your write show true deeply felt convictions to overcome what I pray is just a story. If currently in an abusive household, please ask someone for help. Grew up in this kind of story. Hate never helps. Only hurts you more. Not the dispassionate one that abuses.If a story only, you've given this subject wings. Great write.~~Suseann
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You have a strong philosophy in this. I hope you can live it as well as you recite it. Overcoming the damage done by others shows strength of character, self reliance, and personal growth. Keep it up and you can do anything you set your mind to!
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Awesome poem...that's the attuitude most people need to have...I enjoyed reading this alot...Great Poem!
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truthful
What a look inside to make life work. Build self esteem and rise above it all --what a good lesson to us all. It seems life plays out better when forgivest unfolds.
Best Wishes
Amanda -
I will forever keep reaching for the stars
love myself and help try to heal these scars
step right up on top, use this pain as a stone
The most beautiful contradiction this world has ever known!
Empowering words. You will be strong. I have no doubt.
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wonderful
Wow, that was really great. I loved how it flowed and rymed not to menchen the subject you used. Your peom is very heartfelt and inspiring. -
Amazing
this poem was amazing, it is wonderfull that you have taken those steps to stand up for yourself, this was one of the best poems ive ever read. i could almost feel your pain, although it was probably alot more real to you, and i could feel your strength rising as i read on. this is wonderfull and i hope that you never give up. God is there, God is your strength and trust me He will protect you. it says in His Great Book "Remember, I am _always_ with you" and that is so true. Good luck to you and may God bless you richly in all that you do.
Jaid
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excellent
As I was expecting it's beautiful,no wonder people in here love your poems .And good choice for the category,this poem is filled with hope and has a strong statement.Great rhyming scheme and meter as usual,this adds more power.An enjoyable reading,always a pleasure when I come across your poetry
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Very good.
I agree that this is a very splendid write and you can feel the deep pain. A most powerful write. I do like this one. -
Bravo my sweet one!
I'll not let this world take away my joy
the evil ways of many a deceptive ploy
I'll take back what belongs to me
my respect, my heart and my dignity!
I hear you, I know the strength inside your heart my Lena! Beautifully written Much love and many hugs, Annie
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amazing
Wow
This is full of hope and strength and all sorts of wonderful things. Its so powerful! I love your determination. I wish you all the best. Thanks for sharing! Great write.
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um wow that is trully trully amazing your talent is unbelieveible keep it up
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'All this worlds' I think you're missing an apostrophe here.
Otherwise this poem is indeed inspirational. The title fits well. The ryhme scheme went well too.
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This was a lovely write, so much hope, it's contagious. I see what Ivan Itch says about losing the rhythm a little but I think it's a great write nevertheless, it's difficult to maintain rhythm in a rhyming piece, at least it is for me
so I think you've done a great job with this one. The words you have chosen fit perfectly so I wouldn't change it at all. Beautiful write
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Brilliance TRUE GOLD I love you heart & soul
PurpleSky you’re a rare and precious gem in all our hearts and soulful eyes. Your songs of love always sing of the love in the heavens of the Lords eternal paradise. You stand tall and strong in the sweet Lords eternal shining light. You’re as rich as deep purple velvet gloves, as you stand tall in the love song that surely arrives from Heaven Above. I wrap you in my wings of love, i sing to you of all the happiness that you bring. I sing to you that i care and i love your songs that are filed to the brim shining with graceful love here there and everywhere. ~Je'tadore~ to another shinning masterpiece of your heart and soul that come from shores of Heaven so close to your heartbeat today and yesterday! Write on my friend this song of love will never end! For your heart soul and love are heaven sent! As you wrap us all in loves sweet divine presence. Your songs are what our children need to hear, and feel to walk above the earthly fears. You light up the daytime in your sweet never-ending purple skies of the Lords eternal heart and skies of paradise. I can feel deep inside every word you Penn, as the truth of your love and the all-knowing strength of the eternal heavens. I love everything about your song, from the images you so gracefully place on the page, to every word you sing to all of us, in your sweet golden lavender love everyday. Enchanting enlightening masterpieces of love never stop penning your songs of sweet divine love. ~ Namaste Blessed Be, to you and yours eternally, Sharron~ Keep on reaching for the stars, and keep on sailing in your truth and purple skies of beauty~ You light up the daytime in your sweet purple skies that sing in the dawn nigh twilight.
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Lovely, excellent, fabulous. in so many different ways, keep writing, thanks for sharing
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This is great! It's refreshing to read a good, well-hoped inspiring poem. Such strength of self is evident here. I really enjoyed reading this.
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inspirational! Beautiful!
Thats right you rise above this world and it's opression!!!!!!
Excellent poem, it made me feel so hopefull, I want to be the most beautiful contidiction this world's ever known looking forward to seeing more of your poetry in the future
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I think you did a great job. Very powerful poem.
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Have another look at your third line and again at the third verse (last two lines)Your story line is good but you lose rhyme a rhythm. Your poem runs over a rough patch mid stream, still it has potential.
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This is wonderful!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! beautiful job! the hope is so strong in this poem! amazing!
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