Spit
the snakes,
frogs and
lizards
from your
mind.
Keep the water
of your thoughts
clear
and you will
have a peace.
Author notes
Written April 5th, 1993
A contest entry
- Cheer Up My Daughter. by Poetryintheblood.
450 points, ended May 28, 2008, 18 entries
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Thank you for your entry, Kiarna is actually fascinated by snakes, UNLIKE Mummy Lol, good luck in our contest, Josie & Kiarna
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In my experience a pool of clear water actually tends to attract frogs that in turn attract snakes. The mind like nature despises order and clarity. Still I remain hopeful, that one day we will all see and live in clarity and peace.
Lovely sentiment..very nice write.
Peace and rainbows,
~RJ~ -
Short and to the point. True words spoken! Thanks for pointing it out to me!
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TRUE!
Now this is truly a deep poem. Short, but fabulous...except for one thing...I like the froggys where they are, thank you very much! lol. Wonderful message here though, and one I shall endeavor to achieve. -
Ahhh isn't weird wonderful?? Such a beautiful metaphor, of the darka nd evil and badness in a persons mind being all these venomous creatures. Such a fantastic analogy. If only we could all achieve peace...
Katie xx -
lol, liked your comment. It was not written with that intent, just as a warning to myself. :-)
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Thanks for your comment. Nice meeting you.
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Well! That was a interesting little piece! LOL ^^-^^
It was short form and I really liked it. It seemed very in your face, very matter of fact. Kind of like 'Deal with it. I don't really care what you think~!' Which made me laugh.
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This is a really cool poem... but is it a peace? I thought it was just peace, but that can be my mistake..
Amaris -
short and simple. really good use of imagery. nice and rare work.
hope to read more such lovely pieces of yours.....til then,happy writing
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Hi, welcome to AP
Bruce told me that you are a good writer and a very pleasant lady.
I see that he is right about your work. This is the first I read and I liked it. It's short, which is is my favorite kind of write. I like the thoughts too, a big cleaning up of mind.
Wishing you all the best,
Mari
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Good message lol I just recently posted a poem with the same title. Love succinct writes like this and mildly metaphorical. Good job, nice to meet you and welcome to All Poetry.
Red -
Vivid imagery - short and direct... Almost a surreal presence. Nice and original work. Look forward to seeing your mind exude the intensity that your life has weathered.. brace yourself AP!
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