If I had but one day to live
I'll tell you what I'd do.
I'd take each precious moment and
I'd share them all with you.
I'd wake up in the morning,
Look and see you lying there
With mud pack on your face and
Curly rollers in your hair.
I'd see the cotton neatly placed
To keep your cute toes spreading
And notice how your skin cream
Makes small, wet spots in the bedding.
We'd sit down for some breakfast
Just like ordinary folks
And I would grin to see how you had
Broken all the yolks.
The toast would be burnt to a crisp,
The bacon blackened, too
But it would not detract me from
The wonderment of you.
We'd drive out to the countryside,
You'd say, "Don't drive so slow!"
And miss no opportunity
To tell me where to go.
You'd always let me know that
Everything I did was wrong
And how I was a moron as
We gaily drove along.
That evening we'd have company,
The Whites from down the street
Who dropped by on occasion when
They were too broke to eat.
I'd hear you rant and rave about
My small, low-paying job
And how the house was messy
'Cause your husband was a slob.
All three would laugh at my expense
That would be fine with me.
I'd revel in the sunlight
Of such warm comraderie.
Then, late at night, we'd go to bed.
I'd reach to hold you tight
And see the stare designed to kill
As you screamed, "Not tonight!!!!"
If I had but one day to live
I'll tell you what I'd do.
I'd take each precious moment and
I'd share them all with you.
And, as your snores rang in my ears
A smile would touch my face
Just knowing I would soon be waking
To a better place!
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Written May 5th, 2005
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I'd hear you rant and rave about
My small, low-paying job
And how the house was messy
'Cause your husband was a slob.
Well, I think I know where she's coming from, but I don't rant and rave in front of the Whites up the street, I wait until Mrs White and I go out together to whinge and complain then. I think I'd be more sympathetic if my husband hadn't thrown the sox and jox on the floor that I'd sorted and folded for him and left on the bed for him to put away, I guess I should have done that too. Oh and can you please tidy the kitchen (which means the dishes too) but woke up to find the dishes stacked neatly waiting for me to wash *sigh*
PS - We really do have The Whites living up the street, and they practically live here, but not cause they are broke, we just like to hang out together. -
Wise men say to live each day as if it were your last...they may be right!
Thank you!
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Simply Breath-taking. A rose for you :f
If I had but one day to live
I'll tell you what I'd do.
I'd take each precious moment and
I'd share them all with you.
That had to be my most favorite part. Simply awe-inspiring. I just fell in love with the poem. I will usually have my radio on while I would read, half reading and half listening... but I just completely forgot that it was on. This poem reminded me that we don't know whether we will wake up or not the next day. I believe that this is definitely what I would do if I were to live only one more day on this home we call Earth. Great job and I really loved it.
Tears
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Mike this cracked me up and I was almost positive I had commented on this before so I had better this twice as good as I thought it was.....
If you had but one day to live
I'll tell you what I'd do,
I'd get your tools from out the shed
And say 'Go fix the Loo!"
When that job was finished
I'd then say and with feeling,
"Don't sit down, you haven't time
Go paint that kitchen ceiling."
By then it would be 10 o'clock
I’d make a cup of tea,
By 10 past 10 I'd fill the bowl
You can now wash up for me!
Of course the car needs cleaning
Now don't get on the boil,
While your there, make it worthwhile
By checking the water and oil.
I'd keep you busy all day long
Not give you time to think,
And then after your favourite meal
Say the TV's on the blink!
Now at the end of your day
We can go together to bed,
Cuddle up, remember the past
Speak of things both done and said.
I'd have a little parting gift
Just for old time's sake,
You can have your wicked way with me
'cos tonight my head don't ache!!!!
sorry it took so long to get here but the visit was well worth it.
Von
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Yep, there are a lot of areas in this one that could use polishing. It's one of those pieces of fluff written just to exercise the poetic muscles a bit. Thanks for reading....
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Thank you, huntress....Wal-Mart has a sale on ear plugs!!!
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"Of such camaraderie" would flow better, and be better grammatically.
Also, I would drop "small" form wet spots, to better flow.
however, I'm being pedantic - the poem is fantastic.
Regards,
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I can so relate to that last line, my husband snores worse than anyone i have ever seen. This is so funny Take care
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That was a joke??? I would have sworn it was true!! Glad I gave you a smile, Mark. DOn't know which is funnier, the poem or the people who took it seriously
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Thanks for starting my Monday morning off with a laugh. This reminded of me of that old joke -
Q: Why do men die 20 years before their wives on average?
A: Because they WANT to!
The exchange between you and Symitar was hilarious, too. Top notch comedy, as always.
Mark
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Oh, that was painful!!!
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Yes I got that
Just my point, I would hate to be in your shoes having to wave and say ME ME ME That's what I meant
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Hey, I'm the one waving my hand, saying "Me! Me! Me!".
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I think if I had but one day to live, I'd go spend it with someone who would be nice to me Very cute Balladeer, very very cute. You always make me smile and most of the times you have me giggling loudly Great job on this!
~Lyrical
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Oh Yay!! I'd like to see some of what Miss lily has on display. So I say symitar should be allowed her day. Let her show us her best 'cause that girl wants to play!
You two are sooo cracking me up here. This is better than any TV show and early matinee movie. Well... almost! depends on the company, ya know?
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what an awesome glimpse of true love!!!!! maybe some day that'll be me - i have great hopes and prayers for such a relationship; one that transcends the daily and the mundane, but rather consists of a soul's intertwined partnership/relationship with another in mystical unity
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Now listen here, there’ll be no dyin’
I’ll change my ways, and I ain’t lyin’
No greener pastures will you see
From makin’ tracks away from me.
What can I do, what can I say
Please think again, decide to stay
I’ll think of ways to show you how
My leaf has turned, my light’s on now!
I’ll go and buy some lingerie
I’ll change my ways, I’ll start today
I hear Miss Lily’s Chic Boutique
Has lovely stuff, all soft and sleek.
Your snores are angel’s voices ringing
Now I know that you were singing
Rollers gone and flannel sacked
I’ve got the message, that’s a fact!
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Well, there you are! I rest my case.
You made it very clear
Why hell would be a better place
Than what you mention here.
I've given you the best I can
I'm happy to report
Instead of getting gratitude
You say I come up short!!
So, if my state is terminal,
With some unkind disease
Just pat my head and let me go
To greener pastures - PLEASE!!!!!
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Thank you for reading, Herman. I appreciate your reply
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thanks for allowing me to make you smile, miss
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Thank you, catty one. You have a wonderful laugh Glad I could lift your spirits or make you smile a bit
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Hey, dorkmaster! Don't applaud that despicable poem of Symitar's!! It was cruel, vicious and disgusting!!! As far as old men giving up, well, it's like they say - why do husbands die before their wives? THEY WANT TO!!!
ALways good to see you, koala kutie
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hehe...you are so right. I've nodded my head so much I'm turning into a bobblehead doll!!
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OMG!! As usual very well written and oh so hilarious! LOL Great job Balladeer. You understand what a lot of guys don't! When a woman rants and raves... just smile and nod! LOL Great job!
~ *DJ* ~
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nice... HONEST! ^_^ funny and cheery, yet sweet at the same time!
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HAHAHAHAHA.... this is great, Michael!!! Priceless!! I've read three poems since signing on this morning and each one has lifted my spirits, made me appreciate life even more than I already did.
I love this wonderfully funny piece, and Becky's rebutal above is just as wonderfully funny. You two would be great collaborater, I bet!!
Dee
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This was so cute and sweet and funny! I loved it!
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Hilarious, Lmbo
OMG a man with his glass half full, I think your cup was running over when you wrote this one, would love it on a poster with the title, what everygroom should know. 00
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AAWWW.. THIS WAS A SWEET WRITE..funny too..It express's how you would spend the your last day with the one you love even with all the dislikes that a wife can do..it speaks of great love for her...very well done!!
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I hope someone feels that way about me,like my husband maybe!!! LOL,but I doubt it.That was very sweet,shes lucky to have you.Great poem,It definetly made me smile.
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ROFLMFAO @ Sym. Her retaliation was great. As for your piece it cracked me up. As always. You have managed to show the reason why so many old men give up and are so prepared to cross to the other side in the end with all the nagging and whatnot
Well written my dork lol
You should come write something funny for my new contest get other people to enter too
SHari
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Whatever you have that's not wonderful is certainly well-hidden! Thank you@
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If you had just one day to live
And spent it all with me
Each moment would be precious
But get real, ain’t nothin’ free.
You roll out of the bed and yawn
thick stubble on your chin
Your hair goes up instead of down
And getting’ mighty thin!
I watch you as you scratch your butt
And waddle to the loo
Your belly looks like Buddha’s
And your breath smells like a zoo.
And what’s a little blackened toast
Or yolks that run a bit?
Those things you used to think were cute
And now you throw a fit?
And if you’d ask directions
When you don’t know where we are
I wouldn’t have to navigate
And let you drive the car!
Not everything you do is wrong,
Just most of it, you know,
Hey, every moron needs someone
to tell them where to go!
Why don’t you clean the kitchen
the bathroom needs some work
and bring me bon bons pronto
Before I go berserk!
If you had one day to live
And spent it all with me
Each moment would be precious
But get real, ain’t nothin’ free.
Oh by the way, about that night
I screamed and said “Oh NOOO!”
The gas that came from your behind
Gave off a ghostly glow
You think I snore, you should hear yours
The sound would wake the dead
Thank God for ear plugs and some gin
Or the couch would be your bed!
he he
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LOL! I have no doubt your husband's wife is nothing like that! Write one from my wife's point of view? Can't do it - I don't speak gibber!!!!
Glad you liked it!
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LOL! Well, my Bonnie, I don't drink, I never take vacations...and I'll plead the 5th on the nightly poker
Good to see ya!
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Now Deer! We need to hear the other side of the story.
How you burb and scratch your belly after a few beers.
How you don't shave for a week cause you are on vacation.
How you and your friends love to play cards every night.
These are a few examples of another song from our own sweet
Balladeer.
Hugs BonBon -
Thank you, Anna, but that wasn't a quotation mark, which has two dashes. It was an apostrophe showing the word "because" had been shortened to " 'cause". Glad you enjoyed it...
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That was a funny little poem!
A nice little read that gave me a smile and a giggle
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Thank you so much for the laugh! This was too funny! I liked it so much, I've read it twice! I'm going to bookmark it and read it to my husband--he'll love it, although, his wife is nothing like that!
For your sake, I do hope this is purely fictional! It is well-written and rhymed, but of course you know that. I would love to see one written from your wife's point of view! Thank you for sharing! You are very talented!
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Very nice!!!!!!!!
so sweeeeeeeeeeet!
Very very very senti.
Cuuuuuuute!!
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Very smooth flow, rhymes not forced,
Very nice write.
fav verse:
"You'd always let me know that
Everything I did was wrong
And how I was a moron as
We gaily drove along."
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Absolute beautiful written piece I like this piece very much. Dont we all think those thoughts sometimes?
The part where you open your poem:
If I had but one day to live
I'll tell you what I'd do.
I'd take each precious moment and
I'd share them all with you.
Makes us wanted to read this whole write.
This was absolute an outstanding piece!
Herman -
WOW THIS IS AWSOME I LIVED IT ALOT KEEP YOUR WRITE UP
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This is so beautifully penned. IN a way it's funny, but in a way it is sad. Stay well and cherish each day! LInda
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LOL.. Sounds like you cant wait to get away from her. The ending was great I have to admit. I saw a typo though, when you say 'Cause your husband was a slob.' you forgot the other quotation mark.
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I loved it .It teaches that you never should take things for granted...even the tiny little things in live are important...
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That is awesome. Im sitting here in awwwww. This is very nice. I have yet to find the one I spend my last day with but it is awesome you have already found yours. I hope you have more than just one more day to live with this person. Good write!
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Love the ending, it all made me laugh. Wonderful piece of writing here. I really enjoyed this. Glad I clicked!
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A PLEASURE TO READ!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
wow- weeee!
you are an amazing, talented destined-to-be (if ur not already) potentially fabulous poet. I love the imagery, the moods and the one thing that tops it off is the accurate rhyming and the rhythm of this peice. -
Thi is beautiful. You have captured the real essence of loving someone. This is reality and not fantasy where everything perfect and oh so neatly in place. I know of no perfect people... although some of us are... you know... pretty damn close!! This is great. As always your ability to make others laugh while still delivering a timely message is right on.
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funny and cute, sincere and sarcastic. I'd like it if it was maybe a little crueler, but I guess I'm just a mean person Still, I really liked it.
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There was humour in this as well as being a well written piece. Indeed I loved this it was surely an interesting journey you took the reader on.
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It does make for a funny poem, but I felt sad as it ended. I would be upset anyway but I suppose such things fade as a relationship becomes deeply rooted. Who knows.
The flow was nice and I couldn't find any grammatical errors.
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Lol I recently read a poem from a guy that wrote about dribble on the front of his wife shirt, now this haha. Clever write, life and some people makes you long for heaven.
Red -
This is a beautiful peoms! It shows the little things in life! Keep it up! I will be looking for more of your works!
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This is a long poem... but okay... I like it... The start is wonderful...
Don't 've got anything bad to say
lol
Amaris -
Killer write. Quiet touching to. I like it though well keep writing.
LxSER -
Thats cute!~Britt
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Fine write
Oh how I like this one and it had such a fine hilarious twist.
So well done and delightful -
Bravo1
Cute, I liked the way it flowed. I am not sure what I would do with only one day left, but I am sure that it would be spent just being silly. Take care, Lissa -
awwwwwwwww this is a lovely write that flows well, a nice unforced rhyme to it, the content is both loveing with a hint of humor. I enjoyed reading it and keep on penning
love and light
blaze -
If I had one day to live, i know what i would do
I would make sure I tell my friends "I love you"
And take my kids out for a ride, and maybe even the park
Till the lovely day turned to dark
I would let eveyone know that I have to go
And then pray to the heaven, cause that would be my new home
Micheal,
I really love this poem, I am glad to see you writing again. I was wondering when i would see a new one by you. Your words made me smile and even giggle some...
Thanks for sharing your words with us again
And if you get the chance, check out my new poem,
You might be glad you did..
Much love my friend,
Tammy
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aaawww this was so cute..funny verse's..and sincerity of your love for her all rolled in one ..great right..
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this is so funny. I never even saw the end coming lol. I just thought it was a sweet poem and then i read the last line.... Awesome. Thanks for giving me something light and brilliantly written to read today.... goes off smiling.
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very sweet poem. I'm not a fan of rhyming poetry myself, but you handled it quite well in this. My favorite lines were:
If I had but one day to live
I'll tell you what I'd do.
I'd take each precious moment and
I'd share them all with you.
And, as your snores rang in my ears
A smile would touch my face
Just knowing I would soon be waking
To a better place!
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Those are great suggestions, Lassy...where can I find that dumplin'?
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hehehehe! This poem is well written with flow and rhyme and wit, but if you only have one day, please make the best of it. Get yourself a dumpling, the apple of your eye, so full of warmth and sweetness, to go will make you cry. If she gives you burnt offerings, your meals are strange and odd, no matter--because when night falls, she still thinks you're a god! But I'm supposed to be critiquing, and I fear that I digress--but there are those best left alone to find their happiness!
Cute write, Michael
Edited on May 05, 11:19 p.m. because ''.
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