Dear Broken Hearted,
I may have the answers
To make things alright
I could always be wrong
But I've contemplated all night.
A trembling got started
A fissure of sorts underground
My heart opened up to reveal music
Where once there was no sound.
The mystical beams from the moon
Filled me with comfort from our kiss
I started to swoon.
The day she left, a part of me died
I felt all structures failing
I had been denied.
Someone else has found the key
Helped me to love again
They've set me free.
Yes, there's a good in everyone
But there's evil too
Just wait through the cloudy skies
You'll see the beautiful moon.
When you feel all hope is gone
Look within yourself
You'll find you're really quite strong.
Love, lost, can again be found
Open your heart to others
Take a look around.
Often dare to dream, or dream to dare
If you will only realize
Someone out there cares.
Everyone holds a key
To someone elses heart
Search their soul, you'll find the mystery.
The depth of love is deep and wide
It comes in wave after wave
And it can take your breath away in high tide.
I hope I've answered what you want to know
And the dew will always remain
Upon the tip of the rose.
I'm sorry he only offered you grief to bear
But think of all the happy times
And he'll always be there.
Embrace the day, like no tomorrow
Smile with a twinkle in your eye
And you'll soon be rid of sorrow.
I'll give you my time
For someone once helped me to
Find my reason and rhyme.
As the sun sets, watch pastel colors grow
And when night settles in
Watch the moon brightly glow.
As you sleep, keep a smile on your face
Dream of honeydew fruit, and honeysuckle too
And as you wake, remember that place.
Wait no long, my dear
Please read my words, slowly through
They are always sincere.
Sincerely Written,
Jessica
(A name I hope never forgotten)
Author notes
Written May 5th, 2005
A contest entry
- Love, from a new perspective by sunraezz.
300 points, ended November 11, 2005, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This had an interesting beat to it. I found the rhythm a bit hard to follow, but the words carried it through. I hope your name is never forgotten either. Good luck!
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This was so wonderfully written and an excellent piece. I loved it and your descriptions so vivid my mind could see and feel your words. Great job on this piece. Thank you for sharing it.
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this was excellent.......i love it
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This was a great piece and wonderfullly written but terribly wrong. I sort of had to make myself finish reading it. I lost interest because it just keeps going on forever it seems. Maybe you could shorten your next one up a tad bit? Or not. Anyways it was written well. Try to find something to keep the reader's attention all the way through the poem. Good luck.
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A very deep and touching piece...a very enjoyable write... I hope to see more works like this... keep up the good work!
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EXCELLENT!!!!
wow!wow!wow! what a beautifully written piece! lovely choice of words,smooth flow n a vivd,crystal imagery......what else could one ask for in a poem?
really good conveyance of expressions. although i like the ENTIRE poem,but couln't help falling in love with these lines :
Yes, there's a good in everyone
But there's evil too
Just wait through the cloudy skies
You'll see the beautiful moon.
once again,very well done! hope to read more such wonderful works of yours......till then,happy writing
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I like the way you not only answered my poetic letter but tried to keep with the same formatting as I used in mine. The sincerity of this reply shines through your words...and I thank you for that as well as your entry
Ruth -
this is a very good poem, I liked it a lot. I especially liked:
'Often dare to dream, or dream to dare'
wow.. that ia auch an amazing and powerful stanza! well done
HBH -
Thank you for arising to my poetic challenge. Know that you poem has been read and will be read again before the ending of the contest. I will however reserve my reply, as is my policy, until judging time. Thanks again and good luck
Ruth -
This was very beautiful. The description is vivid, and it's almost as if you can feel the words gently flow. I enjoyed it, best of luck in the contest!
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