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Cheese

My name, is Juan .B Edwardo
I am Her Majesty’s Royal Guard
I am the greatest Swordsman this Country has seen in over 5 years
And my Heart belongs not to any other than…

Cheese

I have seen the great wonders
I have tasted the sweet kiss of Goddesses
I have eaten the sweetest Grapes of all Italy
Yet nothing has compared to my one and only…

Cheese

My Sword Belongs to the Queen
My Body Belongs to the Kingdom
My Loyalties Belong with Italy
But my heart, my heart she belongs to…

Cheese

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So I changed my Screen name to Justin: I need to write something.... and Christina sudgested I write poem about cheese.... I thought this was a ridiculous idea however my Girlfriend Has a Stat Bonus of +5 Will +5 Influence over me so I had to.
Written May 4th, 2005

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  • GracefullyInsane
    January 17, 2006
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    I love cheese too! I liked it, it made me laugh and I needed that today, so thank you, and I'm sure slices of cheese everywhere are thanking you too!
    ~Becki~


  • MovingMountains
    January 17, 2006
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    HaHa! This was so whitty and clever and intelligent. It's amazing how, all though one can experience so much wonderful things in one's life, the simpler things are the ones that we cherish so much. In your case, that simpler thing is none other than cheese. Ha. Well, I like cheese too, so I can relate! Wonderful write!


  • grannyeri gold member
    January 17, 2006
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    Poets can write about anything, so why not cheese? Enjoyed these three short little veerses that say why you love cheese - Cheese Please!

  • calypsodelmar
    June 13, 2005
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    Great fun!

    This was too much fun!

  • CaptainENemo
    May 4, 2005
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    ... Wench... psh seriously who calls their boyfriend Wench? I mean really...


  • jannin
    May 4, 2005
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    Lovely work here... you should write one about Jannin... THAT would be interesting... of course not many other people would get it, I suppose... actually if you write one about Jannin I'll put it on my wall/locker, how's that for a deal? Maybe even get it printed on a t-shirt... that would actually be really cool. T-shirt it is. Get writing, wench
    kisses!
    /jannin

  • Shadows of Dusk
    May 4, 2005
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    Four stars!

    Lovely! I applaud your originality! Who knew such a mundane (gasp I blaspheme!) thing as cheese could be extolled in such high prose? Excellent work, and I hope you continue to vent your spleen in such a creative and hilarious way.

  • cloakedheart
    May 4, 2005
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    cool!!

    i liked it...it was amusing and the rythem of it is really cool!!

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