Quite jaded was my point of view
Much needed was a new venue
Someone, something, to look up to
To start anew, to start anew
Then into my life came sweet you
Aglow, fresh as the morning dew
Love in my heart, soul did ensue
Miracle true, miracle true
In every way you've changed my hue
Always in the pink, never blue
Ardor for you, just grew and grew
While we did woo, while we did woo
To you my love I'll stick like glue
On this earth and in heaven too
We'll hug and kiss with much ado
Bliss continue, bliss continue.
Author notes
Monotetra form.Written May 4th, 2005
sunshine.
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A nicely written Monotetra. Thank you for entering the contest.
Sam
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wow
Love the flow and form it just build upon each verse. I could feel the emotions as I read it. As the relationship evolved so did you! Great job! It made me look at things differently.
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Beautiful form poem. You captured many of my feelings quite well. Bets of luck to you
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I have visited here before and I do like the Monotetra from even more.. Good luck in this contest.
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The depth of love expressed in this poem is beautiful!
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I am rather new to the Monotetra form and I can appreciate the ability to write in this form. You speak of a love that just grows stronger in depth and truth. Very nicely crafted. Good luck in the contest.
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I'm impressed by the unchanging rhyme, but must admit it's a little much for me and seems forced in places. I love the theme. The construction of the last line in every stanza is neat, it helps the flow. All in all, lovely write! Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest!
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Please, please reread the contest description and follow directions. Thank you!
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I like this form; it's new to me and I love the sound...reminds me of a parrot or something. You seem to have it down pat and I think I'll try it myself someday just for fun. Thanks for this entry.
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Nicely lyrical, I especially like this line "In every way you've changed my hue". Thank you for the entry. -N
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Great poem I love how you repeat the last lines of each part.. Very unique! I like the word bliss too i use it a lot in my poetry. Nice work and good luck!
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never put anyone on a pedastel .. they fall down and go boom
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AWWWE!!!! this is so romantic and deep
i love it soo much...its just wonderful. i like how you made each line in the whole poem rhyme i liked this alot..great work!
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Nice job with the continual rhyming pattern.
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I thought it was adorable, lovely, very nicely done. I'm guessing Monotetra is the form and most of the time when I try to write in form the rhyming sounds a bit forced or common, not at all in this case. ^^
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Lovely
This is very romantic and was written very well. I wish the best in the contest and it is a lovely write indeed.
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