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Too much

This is not what I had planned
My life was to be grand
Now I'm full of resentment and doubt
Too much to sort out
I've wasted so much time
I should have realized you would never be mine
Too much anger and too much hurt
Every word exchanged bitter and curt
You push me farther away with each passing day
How did things go astray
Was it you or me
Or is it too late to relive history
Our lives are forever intertwined
This is now our bind

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Written May 4th, 2005

A contest entry

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  • queen Moderators member
    May 4, 2005
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    Love hurts deeply sometimes, but if we didn't at least try we would never know if it is good or not. Love is in a class all by itself Great poem

  • Spartacus
    May 4, 2005
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    Not bad. Very short yet powerful. It's amazing how this just fits perfectly with a past realtionship of mine. It's touching, it really is. I enjoyed reading this. It's helped me see how far I've come. Thanks for writing this.

  • Eva Destruction
    May 4, 2005
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    Thank you for your kind words. I love the idea of this contest! Good luck to you as well. I hope you get tons of entries.


  • Luciferschild
    May 4, 2005
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    this is exactly what i was looking for, short deep and it rhymes!! thank you for entering and good luck