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Faerie Tails

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Once upon a time
in the land of rhyme
lived a faerie with wings
made of silk


she could sing like a lark
and could see in the dark
all the creatures that play
when we sleep

Her best friend was Tufty ( a bunny)
she would tickle his ears for a laugh
he would bounce up and down
and then he would frown 
and go pink from his nose
to his toes

This faerie was special you see
she made wishes and dreams
come to be
so if you are good and wish hard(as you should)
all you wish for is granted for free ...







 

Author notes


Written May 4th, 2005

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A contest entry

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  • cutiepie gold member
    November 15, 2006
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    Ah , faerie tails....had fun writing this Thank you for your kindness

  • cutiepie gold member
    May 25, 2005
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    I am not sure if I won in this contest but I enjoyed writing this as it was a lovely idea to write for young children. Thank you Jessica for taking so much time to read all these poem


  • dadizgurl
    May 25, 2005
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    AWWWWWWW!!!!! Did you win a trophy for this one? You should have gotten first if you did! Great I loved it! I could picture it all..that picture wasnt the only thing that helpe dme!! hehe
    Jessica


  • cutiepie gold member
    May 6, 2005
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    Thank you Kimberley Delighted that you enjoyed this childrens tale Had great fun writing it


  • SusanL
    May 6, 2005
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    I am so glad to see that you reworked this a bit. Thought the internal rhyme worked well, when you are writing for little kids the end rhyme seems more effective, it is easier for them to remember and it gives a natural end to the lines.
    I am glad to see you come rework this, it is a delightful little story.
    Thank you for your entry and good luck!
    Susan


  • Touchof1der silver member
    May 6, 2005
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    Awww... I love the way you hbrought the bunny into the whole picture here. This is so cute. the ending is a child pleaser for certain. I have images of children with their eyes closed tight and their little noses all crinkled as they wish with all their might. Great job! Thank you for the enjoyable read. Good luck in the contest.
    ♥ Kimberly


  • cutiepie gold member
    May 5, 2005
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    Thank you so much for your help I have edited it and it looks far better Many thanks


  • cutiepie gold member
    May 5, 2005
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    What is a story without faeries, pixies and gnomes Glad you liked this, many thanks my friend


  • cutiepie gold member
    May 5, 2005
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    Many thanks for your kindness ...it is always appreciated


  • cutiepie gold member
    May 5, 2005
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    Thank you ...Had great fun writing this


  • cutiepie gold member
    May 5, 2005
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    Thank you Delighted that you enjoyed it


  • cutiepie gold member
    May 5, 2005
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    Glad you liked it


  • Maatkara gold member
    May 4, 2005
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    Very nicely done! I would suggest a little adjustment in the layout of S2 to highlight the end rhymes...

    Her best friend was Tufty ( a bunny)
    she would tickle his ears for a laugh
    he would bounce up and down
    and then he would frown
    and go pink from his nose
    to his toes

    ~G

  • Fellow poet
    May 4, 2005
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    I love Fairys, Elfs, Wizards, Dwarfs, Wata(lol there in my book) any other mystic people, But in my book I have not added fairys, "why not add them" I said. Thanks for the great poem and a fabulous Idea,
    Your poem pal,
    Jonny


  • B Chandler
    May 4, 2005
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    too sweet of a write

    Awwwwwwwwwwwwww this was a really pretty write and should be used in bedtime story books to land the kiddies into bed and watch them fall off to dreamland


  • forgot
    May 4, 2005
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    "tufty" i must say a very creative name. and a very creative poem. i love it, and great tone!


  • Alicia-Nicole
    May 4, 2005
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    This is awesome! Way to write!


  • Deke
    May 4, 2005
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    Nice picture Lynne. It does add to the poem.
    DDB


  • cutiepie gold member
    May 4, 2005
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    I found one hope you like it


  • cutiepie gold member
    May 4, 2005
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    Thank you Yes wish lists come in handy they help Grandma
    and Santa get things right


  • cutiepie gold member
    May 4, 2005
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    Thank you Glad you enjoyed it


  • Windworder gold member
    May 4, 2005
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    I can just see Grandma reading this to her grandchildren who, through twinkling eyes, begin to create their own wish list for the faries to see. This should do well in the contest. Good luck.

  • Miyako777
    May 4, 2005
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    cutiepie, how come you alwways write so cute? Your mind is wonderful
    Well done


  • cutiepie gold member
    May 4, 2005
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    True...I shall have to go look see what I can find Glad you enjoyed it though Many thanks

  • cutiepie gold member
    May 4, 2005
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    Well, they say we all have a small child inside us just waiting to come out and play I really enjoy writing poems for children, comes with having so many grandchildren I think . Many thanks for your kind words


  • October.
    May 4, 2005
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    This is adorable. Now all it needs is the animation to go with, and PRESTO. Cute write.

  • Deke
    May 4, 2005
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    Lynne, this is wonderful--any kid should be glad to have this read to them, or to read it for themselves. Wonderfully well done my friend.
    Deke
    Edited on May 06, 3:45 because ''.


  • masterblaster gold member
    May 4, 2005
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    Ps. now I can so catch you deserve it a great chidrens poem, hugs Di

  • cutiepie gold member
    May 4, 2005
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    Thank you Di, Glad you thought the children would like it That makes my day
    ps, dont worry about the applause thinggys, it is not necessary but a lovely thought

  • masterblaster gold member
    May 4, 2005
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    Hi, this is so cute, a very sweet poem for chidren and yes I would read it to mine, it has a magical feel, soft and gentle and a lot of fun, super my friend, sorry am out of applause and points, it deserves a lot of applause, hugs Di

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