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i hate you

You were here,then you faded away,
why did you leave me, why did you give me grief,
you broke are mothers heart,
because of you i can no longer trust,
you made me feel fear, you made me feel anger,
you made me feel hate,

they say you can only love once you have learned to hate,
they are wrong...


i hate you

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Written May 4th, 2005

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  • BLaCK aRRoW
    June 17, 2005
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    your ending is great!!! I loved it. And your poem rocks. men....hmmmm, i have 6 males in my family, and i can only say that only 2 of them are real men. I hope your okay, and take care.


  • swingxlifexaway
    June 6, 2005
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    good

    Since I assume this is about your father, I have to say, I'm the same exact way. He left my family whenever i was about 3. He cheated on my mom many times, even when she was pregnant with my sisters and I, and I've gone into a strange depression lately over him. I feel bad that I treat him like I do. I use to have a relationship with him, but it's slowly faded since July 4th, 2004. I told him I don't want a relationship with him, but he can't accept it and move on. He's been remarried many times, and he's in his own world with his wife now, that he doesn't care about my health/physical problems, like my ankle I recently hurt. I'm really into sports, and he knows that, and tells me I'm a great athlete, but when it comes to asking him for help to pay for it, he won't. I know it has to be really hard for you, because it's a hard thing to go through, but keep your head up and stay strong. It's not worth feeling sad about if he did such thing to you and your family. Nice poem, and keep up the good work.

    -Hayley


  • rite
    May 5, 2005
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    I believe only few who've never experienced such a situation can even begin to imagine what it is for a child to have to go through a break up. Some things in life just seem to happen to us while there is nothing we can do about it. This feeling of being powerless radiates of your words in a very powerful way, and I do hope if this was written from a real life situation that somehow you'll find the strength to overcome this, run into good friends who comfort you and perhaps will be blessed by unseen hands to guide you. Only sad situations in life make us stronger; I hope one day you'll be able to benefit from this strength, even if this was a situation in which you were dragged unvolutarily. Stay strong and take care,

    Rage

  • Choo Choo
    May 4, 2005
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    It may be not nice,but I still like it.

  • Gods Guitar Geek 93
    May 4, 2005
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    this is an incredable and awefully sad piece, did your father leave you?

  • Sky Prince Ireland gold member
    May 4, 2005
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    SAD BUT GOOD

    I'm so sorry to hear this.
    Nobody deserves such pain.
    I hope you're able to rebuild your
    spirit again and put this person out of your mind.
    (I know . . . easier said than done.)
    But anyway, thanks for expressing yourself so well
    in this poem. It's very good.
    Keep on writing.

    Brian

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