Shed blood tears
As the skin parts
Lose all control
As emotions rage
Kill the innocence
That remains inside
Crush the soul
That fights too hard
Steal the breath
With one fell swoop
Send the pain
With angry words
Take the confidence
Without regard
Defeat the courage
Without trepidation
Slit the wrist
Use my hand
Pour the blood
Use my vein
Cause the pain
But do not hurt
Cause the death
But do not die
Pull the trigger
Use my finger
Break the neck
Use my rope
Feel the pain
Through my body
See the horror
Through my eyes
Yearn to die
And murder me
Open your eyes
And then you'll see
Watch the demons
Come and play
See the torment
Come and stay
Hear the screaming
Cover your ears
Witness the agony
Cover your eyes
Observe what awaits
Change your mind
Use me as a guide
Change the end
Learn from my pain
Turn now away
Taste of your future
Turn now and go
Waste not my life
Discover the message
Heed now my warning
Discover the Spirit
Author notes
I hope that the people who read this poem and want to hurt themselves or commit suicide think twice.
Written May 3rd, 2005
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A insightful read. I have suicidal tendencies, and I do not act upon them, but this would be a great poem for someone to read, to prevent thier suicide.
A great write. I loved the way that you made everything stand out. The short lines and the way you said everything just made me want to keep reading.
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A write that is intense,punchy,in your face ,raw,the red blood tears a startling imagery,a write which sears across the page with angst and emotion.
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great work! dark is the best. And I absolutely love the beat! this would make a good rock song... -
This is really good but it's really sad. And I'm guessing you were going for the dark once again. Good word choice and great job filling it with emotion and despair.
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This poem reminds me of that little demon thing you always see sitting on someones shoulder in cartoons. I love the word choies like "agony" and "torment" they just paint such vivid pictures....Well Done
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once again, another awesome write, its powerful and emotioal, has great flow, defintly book marking this one to. awesome job!!
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Another great write... Good flow, poem full of true and powerful emotion! You are a really great writer : )
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Pop goes the comment cherry, You are so lucky I'm training to be a counsler cause you need help, J/K. lol I love it, your flow is off the hook like usual, and well your just a good damn writer, thats all there is too it.
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