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just a moment

it's missing.  
there's nothing there, but here is my desperation.  
it's missing.  
what am i looking for?  
something tangible, she reasons.  
it's missing.  
and there's no one to turn to.
nowhere to go.

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Written May 2nd, 2005

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  • chintzy faberge
    May 18, 2005
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    *thumbs up*

    It's so sparse it's almost Imagist-esque, so the message gets across LOUD and CLEAR. Nice job!

  • c-town nena617
    May 8, 2005
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    whoa this is such an emotional poem you put alot of thought into which is one reason on y i like it great job and keep up the good work!
    ~Cry5tal