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You ask whats wrong
I just shake my head
It's nothing, so you turn around
maybe all i want is for you to hold me
care for me
slightly kiss me
but you dont
You turn away
Turn away

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Written May 2nd, 2005

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  • sweetcatastroph
    May 2, 2005
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    Aww wow... i like this alot-short and sweet and to the point but its deep...very deep-im going to look for a few more minutes at different poems and if nothing else jumps out at me you'll get the best of the day award :-)


  • shortrocker911
    May 2, 2005
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    kinda leaves you dry...maybe you could keep going with it...just let your emotions take control...its really good so far..but dont let it in there