The Vampire's Regret:
I traverse the mists of the forest floor
her tracks fresh, the scent strong, outpours
a beauty once radiant with life undying
now shrouded in death asleep on the shore.
In the moonlight air on my vampiric wayI spied her strolling, so innocent, young,
the perfect prey, I swoop in for the kill
she awoke, undead, my name on her tongue.
I regret my actions, but, alas, I’m not master
but a slave to the dead realms I tread among now;
still I seek her out for uncertain comfort
her ebony butterflies seal her in a shroud.
She takes her own victims now- unabated her thirst,
my sorrow digs deeper each passing night
I glimpse a lone drop of her wet blood-stained tears
glistening in the moss in the moon’s backlight.
Vampiress Mists:
Her mists sweep over the forest lights
her soul banished from the world she frights
an unliving shadow of the hollow breeze
footsteps gliding soundlessly through the trees.
Her form, sheathed in a dim starlight
moans a surreal voice echoing from afar
screams of the chorus of her ebony butterflies
in flight under the dead trees crumbling abovebeckoning to her victims,
to reinquish their lives
to she, the last who they will ever love.
Flying into the darkening dotted skies
on the wings of here ebony butterflies
her forsaken beauty escapes, no longer disguisingher tortured soul, her blood-stained tears
coldly writing the story of her undead years.
the craving fangs hunt for a taste of fearseeking the next innocent fatality
always thirsting, always drinking
for the blood filled tears flow ever the morrow
leaving a trail of unwilling sorrow.
Forever untouched by the hands of time
skin pale as the first winter snow,
delicate, but perilous as the stormy sky
all surrender to this thorny rose.
Epilogue:
Amid my searches I gaze on higha darkness spreading over my hazing eyes
ebony butterflies take flight in the sky
under a moon-soaked cloud in the midnight mist.
Author notes
Based on the poem "Butterflies in theNight" by Gothic Angel
allpoetry.com/Poem/1230444
Written May 1st, 2005
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Awesome poem AND I love the background also.
Kind of creepy though with the back eyes but I like creepy 
Stay cool and keep writing. Also good luck in the contest.
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nice
lol i envy u lol but anyways this is a very great example of imaginary at its highest peak and i just absolutely love every line and how u separated the point of view of the male and female parts of this write..keep up the good work -
This was very colorful and I guess the word is sensual. You could feel a night mist as he stalks his victim, and I thought the small stance about her being untouched by time was just breathtaking.. Liked the background too, jealous wishing I could use the special backgrounds. Anyway keep penning and don't forget to wear your raybans, Mary
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Parts were splendid, others contrived, overall not an utter waste of time.
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Once again you beat the last...Never to run out of creative work. You are just amazing! Good luck on the contest!
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I love this! Totally cool! it blew my mind very interesting and very creative. Very dark and pretty scarey too. Great work!
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WOW... This is a very imaginative write!!! You did a great job on this one!!! Good luck in the contest!!!
Hugs,
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Glad you liked it- I was thinking that the vampire fell in love with this victim who went off on her own, he regrets what he did and he's drawn to her for an unknown reason!
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Yeah, the pictures are great, nice background, and well, I kind of liked the poem, I was trying to decide if it was from a master to his apprentice grown away, or not...either way, nice, good work, keep it up...
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The poem isn't too bad for it's theme. You did fine. You could have slightly resized the 2nd image and excluded it from the background for easier reading though. I'd like to know more on how the hunter became so enchanted and what happens next.
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Thanks for the critique, but the 'ebony butterflies' are from Gothic Angel's piece this relates to, I can't take credit for originating that, only for the taste in using it here!
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This is well-written and flows beautifully. It's was a real chiller poem. i personally think the graphics are wonderful and add to the terror of the poem. I love the phrase " her ebony butterflies seal her in a shroud." You are a wonderful writer and I love your work. Take care - joanne
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Wow This amazing! I really enjoyted reading this one!
Im glad my piece gave you the idea to write this! I'll add this to my bookmark!
Angel
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Awesome.
Well this was a pretty good vampire poem and I also liked the graphics involved in this one.It was really neat and matched the poem. I personally found nothing wrong with this but some have different interests than I. -
I thought the last picture was total cheese. As far as the actual piece is concerned, I don't really like fanfic, so I'll pass on this. Just didn't want to waste your click.
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Awesome I like it. I really like ur pictures too. Keep up the good work
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