Your gypsy lips whisper the same words
So many have said
But somehow,
When they play across your mouth and
Caress my cheek and ear,
They are different.
They weaken any resolve
I might have feigned
And I give in to you
Allowing you to catch my weight in your arms.
These things I carry,
These wings,
I never noticed how heavy they were
Until you relieved me of my duty,
Until you watched my innocence
Swirl around us like smoke
And disappear.
I had thought it would be dark
When I lost myself in you.
But light falls across us and
Those who see
Know what I know.
Lust is not the taboo we’d always thought.
It is not only meant for dark alleys and dirty rooms.
I writhe and breathe deeply
After you’ve gone.
I miss your desire wrapping around me
Your body and breath against mine
And I know how beautifully forbidden
Falling from grace can be.
Author notes
I created this background from the picture because I really didn't have one I thought would work. I still want to work on this poem, so comments are appreciated. I have read and commented on all of the entries down to "Rapture."
Written April 29th, 2005
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The last two lines of this poem are the payoff. I feel like I'm on a teeter-totter while reading it. And the words "beatiful... falling from grace" land me safely on the ground.
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Another golden poem which i missed when it was first posted , and i am so glad i searched it out , after reading Playful's final words, excellent
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Congratulations on the Gold dear..
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Another poet in this contest is hon.. Arabian Jewel.. and had the nerve to get snippy with me about it lol.. I know you posted your entry first .. Take Care, Catressa
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Yes, I made it (from pieces of the original picture) in photoshop. If someone else is trying to claim the background, I'd love to know who. I've made many of the backgrounds for my own poems, so look at more of my poetry for examples.
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So you did make this background right? Cause a certain someone who I will not name is being a snot lol about it and irking me now lol .. I tend to get a bit miffed when riled..
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Back tonight for judging with a few others Saraphina. I remember how quickly you posted this beautiful and elegant write filled with sensuality to taste and tease the senses. Then you made this beautiful background to compliment the page. You were truly inspired by the image and wrote on the fly. Quite refreshing my dear..I would try to pick a stanza but it's perfect in it's entirety! Bellismo! "Thank you" so much for the quick creative write and entering my contest. All the best hon
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The background is fine for anyone to take, although I wouldn't mind a mention if they do
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I really enjoyed this.Strange how the same picture can cause such different reactions. Sensual in an innocence thst's hard to do but you accomplished it very well.
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Did you give permission for Arabian Jewel to snag your background hon? I wanted to let you know as I know that backgrounds take some time to make.. Even when you have one with a picture already.. Take Care again, Beautiful write, Catessa
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This is absolutely beautiful! The words are delicate and well penned. The love and lust you have created and descirbed can be felt, and is written artistically and isn't tasteless as some erotic writes can be. And I must agree with Cat. You had me with the last line. Falling from grace... I know the feeling
Shari
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Oh you had me with the last line honey.. Fallen from grace can be.. It is ever so delightful to be bad sometimes is it not? What a truly good write you have here. Take Care and Be safe, Catressa
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This write flowed really well and I flew through it as I was reading and I like how you used the image for the background..if I had a paid account I'd do the same but nooo
anyway I really like this write and it seems like something that would stand out in a crowd..which is important when there are a lot of entries! Once again great write and best of luck in the contest!
-Lis
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Wow...This is such a beautiful poem! And it's soo well-written and full of passion. You definately deserve(d) to win that contest! I hope to see more good stuff from you soon!!
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lol I hadn't realized you entered my contest until after I entered yours lol. I usually don't take a peek at the author's name just their work. I'm such a ninny sometimes. I do love this piece and the perspective you've taken with it. I'm curious enough to enter myself but I have a feeling it just won't be for me. Good luck in the contest, this is an amazing write.
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This poem holds the same idea as mine but is actually alot better than mine! Lol. I saw pure lust in the picture and like you, used it without seeming to lewd or perverted. Its hard to talk about sexual fancies and still sound like a poet (not saying that erotica isn't poetry.. you know what I'm saying!) Yes, great poem and I don't think I need to wish you any luck in the contest!
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I like how you peiced it on the backdrop, nice, and the way you left your poem open to interpretation, becasue you could be talking about one thing, and then not, either way, nice write.
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This is awsome. I also love the background you did. Wonderful job. Good luck on the contest.
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This so IS a different slant on the image posted,Strangely it does work,In a symbolic way.Also so a little erotic taken with the subject matter,Most of us have tended to look on the Angelic side good write enjoyed it good luck in the contest
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Wow. This is really very good. I liked the falling from grace angle you took with this. I probably would never have thought of that. the idea of the heaviness of the wings was really beautiful. Good luck!
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Beautiful write my friend..what a great inspiration from that picture..good luck in the contest
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Great poem...I like the images you've woven into the piece.
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Thank you..
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sure- no prob
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I love it dear..Now you know if it's okay with you..I would like to snag this background too. Please?
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Check out the background I created from the picture Just added.
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It's definitely vague enough to be ok. Thank you once again for such creativity and on the fly at that. I will refrain with too many comments on this piece until judging day
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