Twist it
turn it
blend and smoke it
sniff it
coke it
For it is
just that
a key to turn you into
that hideous
creature
of the night
prowl
foul
disembowel
yourself
prostrate and crawling
sits on the shelf
in the office
green machine
lofexidine dream
sweets of the scheme
Let Nurse Ratchett
hold the scream
scream
silent
silent
night
sing it
sit
tight
turn the key
Author notes
Just some rambling thoughts of the other side..
Plus as a joke.. and it was a joke.. one of the clients called me Nurse Ratchett the other day.. but I know I'm tough with them.. but so far this month.. only 3 have walked.. which ain't bad.. 
Written April 29th, 2005
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wow fantasic flow you got here, you are a very talented writer im glas i was brought to this poem it is great -
understand entirely, great!
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that's cool.. lolololol
as long as ya give me credit when used.. lololol
hehehe
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maybe it's just me, but the flow seemed to flip right after the flip it to the for it is part and it slams the reader. i do particularily love "prowl foul disembowel yourself" and keep repeating it. i'm stealing that line in particular and running!
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Many thanks.. I really appreciate you dropping by.. Mr/Miss/Mrs Eye.. lolololol
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The short lines and the flow do almost add a beat feel to it but also a haunting quality, somehow appropriate to the subject. The repeated "it"s and the few rhyming lines also add to the flow. Well done.
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Intriguing Darkness
This felt like scatt, I can imagine some modern poet reciting this in a smoky Jazz cafe'. Your words have a way of drawing me inside, and though "Key" is much darker then the poems I read previously, I enjoyed it just as much. Wonderful. -
well unlike juvetrent, i liked the rhyming as well as the word repetition in this....i felt the rhyming helped fit everything together all nice and pretty and the repetition just reiterated(sp?) your point, nice job gilly!
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this is very cool.... though i do belong to the other side... this rocks.... that is one of my fave books as well
billy -
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Love the reference to my favorite book!!!! Brownie points and applause to you! But also, it was very well written. Liked how you rhymed only in certain places. Liked how it was about a topic that a lot of people don't like to write about. -
wow, this was good, it was creepy, very creepy but good, i havent read a poem like this in a long time, very nicely written
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I didn't like this as much as others. Many of your rhymes seem forced and your word repetition takes away from the impact instead of enhacing it.
But then again, what do I know? -
some keys turn us into hideous creatures, but i believe there are other keys you can turn
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Great
The key is in the arm is in the ward is in the place where all people scream, silently loud and piercingly silent. Far above the normal, keep pushing on. -
I liked this plus the cloud background makes it perfect.. Ahh hon, very fitting today for my mood.. I am guessing you are a therapist? If you can move men/women you can move mountains
Take Care and best wishes, Evil Wench HQ
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sweet
nice job its very true. u put this in words that i can understand.lol maybe you can critique my poems too.
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