I love the way the little girl on the street
stays and stays for all to see
She has lived there all her life
Not knowing she was in a place of hell
For her this place is better than her own home
I love to see those fucking jocks snicker
at that one lonely, anti-social boy
Yelling and beating him up everyday
And in the end they don't know that he sees
them dress and undress in the same locker
I love to see the guy be turned down
because of the color of his skin
Then go home and tell his wife he failed
so there's no food on tonight's table
It's going to be harder to live
I guess what I love the most is
that in this country we have zip
We do not follow our own laws
We enforce them on the others
We're the best hypocrites in here
Author notes
“God didn’t create us, we created him”
This is option 1....I think. I don't think that is a good poem but I tried. Hope this what you wanted.
The first stanza is of a little girl who lives on the streets and loves it better there.
The second stanza is of a gay boy who is beaten up constintly and yet no one knows he is gay.
The third stanza is racism. When people are turned down and its getting harder and harder to keep on living.
The last one is just my opion of this contry at times. A commerial said once that we are a melting pot. Well thats true, but that still doesn't say that we like it.
Written April 29th, 2005
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A contest entry
- Sarcasm Wanted [contest] by -Silenced Dreams-.
400 points, ended May 8, 2005, 2 entries
Gold trophy winner
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Comments
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This is a great piece! I like the way you put the different kinds of people in today's society into the different stanzas, that worked really well. The author's notes helped because it gave a clearer picture and meaning to the words, so thanks for putting those in as well. My favorite part is stanza one because it is really powerful, just with the whole idea of it. The last line is a bit awkward, but a little rewording of that can make it really powerful. The title could be a bit more inventive, but it reflects the ideas in the poem well, so it works. Overall, this is a great piece! Great job and good luck in the contest!
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wow i loved this Angel .. i've read them all in this contest and I think its by far the best one so far
very very nicely done hun .. best of luck 
and keep the ink flowing hun
~Aimee
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Beautiful my dear, truly beautiful. This is the sort of thing I wanted, its deep, dark and the subject matter gets right under my skin. Perfect. Thanks for entering and good luck.
Take Care
- Becca
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