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How Was Your Day, Sweetie?

All of what is absorbed into my face

Is reflected back unto your face

With words, kisses, and teeth

In this way

We are dependant on one-another

I don't listen so I can brood over the facts

I listen to recall the time that

I listened to a beautiful story

With an ending beneficial to all aspects of life

So I can relay the experiences

To you, with said

Words, kisses, and teeth

And so the days pass with a sort of

Plant to water relationship

Switching roles

And eventually growing into

Unexpected things such as

Large wolf and small white rabbit

For an anniversary we will dull things down

Because by then we have grown into hippos or lions

Being much too much for a small dinner party

A salad for the woman

A steak for the man

Music set to the fluctuation of the clouds

Which are numerous, spread out like wool

Dreams freshly sheared from the human mind

You smile at me

I can't help but laugh

Continuing the everlasting saga of

How my day was...

Author notes

I suppose this would be #4.
It's for my boy, if you couldn't tell. x_x;
Written April 28th, 2005

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  • Almighty Aphrodite gold member
    May 28, 2005
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    Sometimes, just having someone to listen to you is better than being wined, dined, and romanced the entire day. Quite a few people know how my day went yesterday--it was kinda terrible However, this is a lovely piece, and I think that it is playfully sweet. Nowadays, I don't have anyone (as far as significant others are concerned) to listen to me...which is both a bad and a good thing; it is not all that good because it means I am easier to frustrate and anger...but it is a great thing because it forces me to write Thanks for the lovely entry, and the best of luck to you in the contest.

    Many blessings,

    Raven Aurora


  • poetryality silver member
    May 24, 2005
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    Very nicely written with a grand sense of fun and fullfilment. It seems that you enjoyed writing this and that's what it's all about. Thank you for the entry and the best of luck to you.

    Renee ♥

  • kikibaby
    May 22, 2005
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    This is a very well written piece, I enjoyed reading it. Your words flowed very nicely. Good luck in the contest.


  • May 10, 2005
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    This is magical and reminds me of a fairy tale about fantastical love. Very nicely written. Thank you for taking the time to enter our contest and good luck.

    Charles