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Alone...






You are alone,as she lays with
her husband...you are alone as your wife
lays with her lover..you are alone? 
How does it feel?




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Written April 28th, 2005

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  • May 8, 2005
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    It feels lonely! This is surreal to me! I am alone!


  • Catressa gold member
    May 2, 2005
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    Ouch .. damn not sure what else to say here.. just ouch.. LOL Thinking someone wasn't taking care of his business on either end of the spectrum.. Figures Your writes are making me think way too damn much my Lovely Aunt.. I Loves ya, Catressa


  • poetryality silver member
    April 29, 2005
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    Ha! Lonely sons of guns, serves them right! LOL You are never alone my heart, believe that! This is so to the point! There is no need for verbosity to get a thing said> EXCELLENT! Ripping!

    Much Love,
    Renee ~♥~ ~♥~


  • Sweet Melissa
    April 29, 2005
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    My, My! Aren't we wenchy in this one?
    Great job babe.........duh!

    Melissa


  • Always Deena
    April 28, 2005
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    Honestly,lets call it Karma,what comes around goes around!

    Thanks
    Deena


  • poeticallyinlove
    April 28, 2005
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    do sense bitterness?

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