Wheeling little Betty on the cart,
Places a cold hand on a colder heart.
Falling beads of perspiration,
Grinning with anticipation.
Spiders spin their blackened webs,
Widows cry with tears of dread.
The wicked smile spews the froth
As poison drips upon the cloth.
Why did her mommy have to go?
A drunken killer years ago.
Matters of no concern to the hunkered kin,
The tiny infant an act of sin.
Bluing flesh in her satin dress,
With hungry eyes they do caress.
Sighs with decay upon his breath,
Wash your hands as Lady Macbeth.
A meal of cockroaches soaked in brine,
The decrepit feed their Frankenstein.
A planet so brutal and so untrue,
With outstretched hands, pretties for you.
Author notes
Okay...if you don't know already, this is an ode to Alice Cooper. To make it fun (plus I was uber bored) I've made a bunch of references to his songs and albums. Try to find them all...haha
Written April 28th, 2005
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A contest entry
- Veins of Glass by Allyson Michelle.
300 points, ended May 2, 2005, 4 entries
Silver trophy winner
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Very good with delicious imagery. So dark as well, I like your style. If you want, I'd be honored if you'd join my group: http://allpoetry.com/group/info/Macabre%20Madness?stay=1
I think we could use you.
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This is really interesting. I am not one to know much about Alice Cooper myself, but the poem is really intruiging as well. I like the imagery and the rhyme of the piece...it is really catchy. And its so twisted and sad and I just really liked it. Thank you for entering. Good luck in my contest.
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I don't know enough about Alice to get the full effect from this, but I thought it was great. Great imagery and diction. Again, the metre gave me some troubles reading it, but I liked it!
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Can't say i know enough of Alice Cooper to pick out the refrences, but well done of getting them in there anyway. thanks for the read which was really entertaining, if only a little hard to follow.
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'Bluing flesh in her satin dress'
You have some brilliant phrasing in this piece. I love the word usage very clever.
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I'm not one for Alice Cooper so I'm going to comment as if this wasn't one of 'those' poems. Granted, I do like those poems but since I won't get the references I can't judge it like that. But besides that, this is quite good. I'm almost glad I don't have the backstory on this one. I enjoyed it alot for the face value. I think you've done very well here for a bored afternoon. I'll tell you that my bored afternoon poems usually end up in a digital grave with Bill Gates soul and 37 trillion lines other lines of code.
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This poem is haunting, in the best way possible. The rhyme scheme and imagery make for an interesting read that keeps you wondering what will come next. I adore this piece, good job and keep up the spectacular work!
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Amazing. Wonderfull. I love it. Do you think if you find time you could read some of my poetry and give me pointers? I love yours...
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wow. this is dark in a whole new way.
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Wonderful Little Nightmare
good hell this is a wicked piece!
the grand daddy of shock and more shock would love it,im sure.
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Oh i'm just so glad to see some creative rymhes, I've they don't seem super forced and the refrences are fun and fit the mood, a fine write good luck for the contest.
~Peter
:edit: ha just looked at the closing date back in may lol
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AC's pretty tight.. But yeah.. killer ode to him (& the rest of the band).. I really had a fun time reading this! & hey thanks for commentin' on my lastest Lamia!! Thanx
ttyl!!
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WOW. This was really an astonishing piece. The imagery and the haunting pictures you painted are incredible. It's like the picture is being painted before my very eyes. The devilish charm this piece seems to posess is amazing. This piece is astonishing and awe-inspiring. I loved reading it, it was incredible. I'm so glad you entered.
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crazy amazing poem. its so dark and the imagery is wonderful. I can't say anything worth saying so I won't, lol. fantastic write.
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Cool Poem hun. I liked the lady Macbeth part, and the Decrpit feed their Frankenstein. Cool stuff. Well.. I love you
and miss you too. Bye
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