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My Eye

I HAVE ONE EYE.

AND WITH IT I SEE YOU.

I SEE YOU STANDING.

I SEE YOU FORGETTING.

I SEE YOU BLEEDING.

YOU MIGHT WANT TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENED TO THE OTHER ONE.

I'D LIKE TO KNOW THE SAME THING.

I'M ONE-EYEDLY CURIOUS.

ABOUT WHAT HAPPENED TO MY OTHER EYE.

I THINK THAT PERHAPS...

SOMEONE CUT IT OUT.

SOMEONE VERY SPECIAL CUT MY EYE.

THEY TOOK A BLADE...

A NORMAL BLADE...

AND THEY SLICED MY EYE OPEN.

I THINK THERE WAS A LINE.

THERE WAS A RED LINE.

IT CUT THROUGH EVERYTHING.

WHEN I WAS A CHILD...

A NORMAL CHILD...

I WOULD CUT THINGS DOWN WITH A LINE.

A LINE... A DOT ON THE WINDSHIELD

THAT... WOULD CUT THE WHOLE WORLD IN HALF

AS I SAW FIT

PEOPLE DIED AFTER BEING CUT

AND HE CUT MY EYE OUT

HE DID IT

And I let him... because it was beautiful.

Author notes

#5? #3? I dunno, but  here it is. Also, I may add, that yes -- there is a reason for the capslock. I screamed this, outloud and recorded, thus, little proper letters just would not do.
Written April 28th, 2005

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  • StalkingWaffles
    April 28, 2005
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    wow.... excellent! i really enjoyed this poem.
    you did a wonderful job!!!
    i love how you screamed the words...
    and i love the line "And I let him... because it was beautiful."
    thanks for entering and best of luck to you in my contest!
    ~Maggie~