I slowly start to break down,
As my world crumbles though.
My world is shattered
and cracked only leaving pieces of my so-called life.
What is left is like a tattered balnket
worn and delicate
being easily able to simply fall
to
threads.
"Its not that bad,
only a little heart ache.
Only a little heart break."
But I hurt. I physically hurt.
My heart will soon cumbust.
Ripping through my chest only leaving a hole were someone once belonged.
But now that place is empty.
He will never come back and fill his hole.
The only place he belongs in my life.
The only place he is wanted in my life.
The only thing he has destroyed in my life.
And even though he knows all of the hurt and longing i have for him,
he is still My Only.
The Only.
The only one that can fix it.
The only one that can change it.
The only one that can make me smile.
If only he knew was my only.
Author notes
this is a poetic exaduration on a real life experience.
Written April 27th, 2005
A contest entry
- emo by YourCurse.
300 points, ended May 15, 2005, 7 entries
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good job
Very sad write,
Alot of people claim these type of poems to be cliche, and annoying, but i think that their comments are cliche, and annoying, I like this type of poetry, for it is understandable, and show alot of emotion, it is true, and not constructed to gather others attention and admiration, good job, the incomparable, Crackertl82 -
This is sad with an enormous amount of beauty though. It is odd how we work. We cannot for whatever reason have a person within our lives because they either don't want to or they are not of a healthy nature for us. However, they seem to be the only one that fix the pain. It is difficult but with time, it does ease.
Very well expressed. Good luck within the contest.
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This was greaet. I loved it, I like how you made it an exaggeration of the truth. I don't really know what else to say, you did an excellent job, I loved it! Keep it up!
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This was a wonderful poem. It was heartfelt and full of emotion.It was such a pleasure to read. Thank you for sharing this terrific poem. Thank you so much for reading and commenting on "A Christian Sailor". I so appreciate it. Take care, Sandy
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Great
I know exactly how you feel and it really sucks. I really like how you made everything connect back together at the end ^_^ Great job!
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